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Pretend


Let's ...

              sigh together
                moments of splendor where
                  vivid peaks of intrigue
                    cast aside our ghastly rogues.


Today ...


              I captured our 'place'
               in a crystal sphere of seer knowledge
                where destinies pursued were granted

                                     ... in tracts of imagination.


Yesterday ...


                     You said your goodbyes
                       in tranquilizer tones, peers of
                         faded overgrowth as envious sopranos

                                          ... split leather drums.


                I feel you still ... lingers of face-brushes
                    and strokes of lovely hair ...
                       Whispers on the treetops glide
                          smoothly in my ears and I wish only ...

                                         ... to pretend you were alive again,
                                               today and each day thereafter,
                                                      my inamorata.

Author notes

Prompt: http://s287.photobucket.com/albums/ll133/Nighttime-angel/?action=view¤t=ef00ff351f77a9e7c642313f95e8f452.jpg


me likes this one too.

You have 2 chances.. if you don't like the first prompt that I give, you have one more chance after that.


there isn't a line limit today. the time limit that you have is no more than 1hr. but there are rules, isn't there always rules?

Rules are:

No sticky caps
No chat speak
No bashing other poets & their work
If you reserve come back.
You have ONE HOUR to write me something, if you haven't written anything by then you will be removed.

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  • Nighttime angel
    June 16, 2008
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    you weren't kidding were you when you said it was sad. this is so way beyond sad.. the imagery is beautiful, the poem is very sad, words penned from the heart, the emotions burned upon the page with emotions so strong and powerful. ones that can be felt through out the whole poem. I truly love the style you wrote this in.

    excellent take on the prompt.


    good luck

    kat


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 16, 2008

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    I just had to be listening to "Almost Lover" as I read this, didn't I??? This is just beautiful! A sigh of heart, where love lingers - frozen; simply a shimmer left upon the winds of change. Excellent depth and imagery.

    This one wowed me...


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Awww omg BAMS this was so sincerely beautiful and deeply heartfelt! I loved everything; the metaphor, exploding graceful imagery across the page, and the style your chose to write it. The ending was so beautiful with "my inamorata" --my love in Italian Cause I'm Italian

    Amazing write & best of luck A winner for sure!


    • Solo Wisp gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      ... and here I thought you were Canadian. *snicker*

      Thank you my BAMzie.

  • Nighttime angel
    June 16, 2008

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    http://s287.photobucket.com/albums/ll133/Nighttime-angel/?action=view¤t=ef00ff351f77a9e7c642313f95e8f452.jpg

    this one is different.. a challenge perhaps..

    you know what follows right?? if you don't blah blah blah






    kat

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