You and I, my love,
Awed by the enormity of distance
And remoteness of memory,
Are nudged away by silence,
Like the space probes
Nudged away by tails of fire,
And, no matter how slow,
We will learn to obviate
Each other from our private reveries.
You and I, so used to each other,
Will master the finest deception
In the mediocrity of our imagination
And inconsequential syllables
Uttered out of thoughts and emotions.
Each engaged in the narcissism
of bigoted deductions,
We inch further away from each other.
You and I, my love,
In the silence and solace of our hearts
Live a life of contradictory truths
Of being close yet so far,
Of being present yet absent,
That haunts our capacity of lovingness.
We who wrenched the neck of our own love,
Which was just a tiny embryo,
Couldn't have known it too was life.
16 June, 2008
Author notes
First poem after a year of hiatus. I hope its not that bad.
Please tell me what you think
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great write all the words are so good and so true i can not choose my fav one well done
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so true, sad but mellow and full of love but sad again as it is so true
I have always been an advocate of "distance makes the heart grow fonder" but yes not in this case, it makes it harsher and deletes the good feelings and memories bit by bit
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You and I, so used to each other,
Will master the finest deception
In the mediocrity of our imagination
And inconsequential syllables
Uttered out of thoughts and emotions.
Each engaged in the narcissism
of bigoted deductions,
We inch further away from each other.
Bravo, love love love this part here! I felt as I read this piece. It made me stop and sigh for a moment. Lovely contemplative piece indeed!
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wow
what an amazing poem i see some much potiental in your work its very good i love the bigger and better vocabulary its very good it gives the read something to learn...its very good nice job..=)
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nice..words to ponder on
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I loved the ending - unexpected and deep. This poem is sophisticated and looks at enduring love that has its strengths and weaknesses brought about by time. You have used simile to great effect- especially in the first stanza and over all I thought this poem was inspirational and interesting to read
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Humm..depicting the hard truths of life through the immagery is a skill of the poet....I love it..well done..and my thanks for sharing it..
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oh this is stabbing and beautiful. i am trying to decide my favorite part, but i like every part of it.
"Awed by the enormity of distance
And remoteness of memory," - is poignant.
i like the way this deals with physical distance and emotional distance. sometimes people can be very "close" emotionally with one another dispite physical separation, or people can be very close physically but not be in "touch" with one another emotionally. great write. - NANGALEEMA
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