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It is my rite.

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We all had “that” House,

in our neighborhoods.

The one that stood out,

barren from the rest.

 

Landscaped by nature harshly.

Tangled in web’s of vine, wort,

and english of ivy. Blackberry

entwined as dark “not welcome”mat.

Curiously defining stark-ness through-out.

 

The only presence of life,

candle's light of night.

Even the crows hid quietly

from sight.

 

My sixteenth birthday was close at hand.

Mama and Papa were more excited then I.

Nightly dreams, cold sweat, odd yearnings.

Seductive whispers unravelling lust,

anticipation's dread,

the unfolding of wickedness ahead.

 

It was late,

after the basketball game.

Thursday night walking home,

blindly I almost bumped,

right into him, embarrassingly.

 

There he stood…..in the flesh…..

a silhouette of all my yearning dreams

wrapped tight.

Both of us “stuck” scenting the other.

 

When I opened my mouth to speak

he simply smiled

faded across the street,

arousing me to no end.

 

My heart was beating faster,

then I could run.

And run I did!

All the way home

Panting out of breath.

 

Who stalked whom,

is not the question.

I could not find rest,

peace, or happiness

until I was his, clenched,

immortally. 

 

For nearly four centuries,

I have never left his side.

Upon this birth year,

it is my rite to choose

his next bride.

 

A sacrifice,

you would not comprehend.

Believing in Hollywood movies and pretend.

The essence of un-ending life

requires the ultimate price.

 

My flesh,

in exchange for his eternal life,

maintained.  Honored am I,

to relinquish with dignity and pride.

 

I will return to the earth,

the ashes of life.

Breathe deep,

the un-encumbered sleep.

 

Thirsting,

for tender morning light,

seeking,

an innocent woman child.

Sixteen,

full of dreams, and odd

sense of yearnings.

 

To return to me,

daylight's dawn

of

forgiving mercy.

 

 

 

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Author notes

Contest prompt: Vampire stories.
per contest" I am Wonderful"

I tried to choose an unusual twist.
It was fun to write.

(I come from a long line of irish story-tellers,
He (grandpa) would have made it a keggar
and end it with ...
see what happens when you drink!)
giggle. I never would have gone to a basketball game,EVER! Laughing,
wink-wink!

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  • Silent Saint
    August 17
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    ooo spooky...i liked it

    the picture was clear and i could feel a shiver run down my spine! very revieling.


  • Elavina
    August 17
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    Whoa

    Amazing . . . . .I'm left speechless. Just flat out amazing. You go!

  • celadia
    August 7

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    I like the start best and the description of the house, there does seem to always be a scary house every town you go to, it's true, even though this is a fictional poem. The part about the vampire man and the sixteen year old girl is a bit eerie but in a horror story way because don't we all worry about the young being taken in by an older disreputable man, in this piece a vampire or am I reading this wrong? any way I like that about it because I believe that horror stories at heart are moral stories and here you are teaching people what happens when you are not aware.
  • This is great and with amazing pics. Please remember to put your option choice in your author notes. Thanks for your entry.

  • markgrif gold member
    June 23
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    A new favorite of mine of thine.

  • limechic
    June 22
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    loveee the imagery! i could picture that house with no effort at all

    great write!!
  • Excellent

    Wow, a wonderful dark write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
  • Humm..what a crucial travel of the thoughts uyou have transformed in the wonderful poetry......well done...and thanks for sharing it

  • enitsirhC
    June 22

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    Wow, this is intense!

    It's written very beautifully, and has AMAZING imagery!

    Best of luck in your contests!

  • This was amazing!
    Beautifully dark and stark in description. It felt like a tory - but I think you wanted it to be that way. Really good

    applause for you

  • Wow!

    Reading this was like watching a horror movie! I never would've expected a write like this from you! You did marv at presenting this. I was held captive, though I was a bit wary of continuing on, sensitive gal that I am! I wan my Mommie! Phew...honestly..really fine & scary tale! All the best in the contest!
    BTW...loved the graphics, the pix & the font color to boot!

  • This was very well done I like the take on a vampyre. Many fear taht which they cannot understand. Thank you for sharing this amazing write and could I ask you to please put "I am wonderful" in your AN as per the rules. Thank you in advance. Wonderful write Good luck with my contest

  • NurseyPoo
    June 17

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    Excellente!

    This held me all the way through and left me wanting more. You encompassed all the attributes that make for an awesome read. I'll be going to read more of your writings.

    . Rewarded 4


  • edward81
    June 16

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    AWESOME

    that was a sweet poem. my personal favorite part was the beginning about the house. it made me think of where i had seen that house and that is where the story took place in my mind. AWESOME POEM

    . Rewarded 4


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 16

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    whew!

    just made it to the restroom in the nick of time! l.o.l. almost crapped my pants! j.k.!! this was awesome! it had sensuality, evil,longing, lust, dark humor,and a wow factor! good write my friend loved to trip into darkness!

  • JWGoethe
    June 16

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    Very imaginative and cool. I could picture the lonely, haunted house, so well was it described. I love the subtle way you described the seduction as well, the giving in to temptation, and the power of young lust for more than just love or sex, but for life itself. Excellent!

    . Rewarded 6


  • Jfd
    June 16

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    I LOVED it....from beginning to end.....so true about that house everyone has in their neighborhood.....I was captivated the whole time, and I loved your little twist and turns, in fact, I wish there was more!!

    P.S
    if you haven't already checked out the Twilight series, you should! I think you would like it, it's aimed for teens, but this college student couldn't put it down! I read all three books within a week hehe


  • Lucy. gold member
    June 16

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    Great take on the prompt! Wow! I think I read that whole thing holding my breath. Well done, good luck in the contest.

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