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Between the Stained Linens

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Your tongue slithered down corpses
as lust plagued your filthy head
with sewage dreams of love
in a modern day quote of "business"

You could slip pleasure in elastic airways
where asphyxia became a key role investigation
letting loose as he'd come
and a million stories of the after "perfection"

 

Fanning yourself in moneys glow

bloating of how easy it was to work what you are

laying on the bed for every fat pig that couldn't get laid

and the satisfaction of getting something, doesn’t mean your pretty;

 

Seduce with your wicked heart, following destruction

as you cease power in the ruins of affections

burning wits with your fiery luscious locks

attracting flies with sapphire glowing lights.

 

Envy chews your heals, as you trip over thrusts

moaning for every bit of pleasure

as fancying excitement didn't replace wedding bands

secrets locking lips, not the wanting of lingering.

 

As I pity, you can play the mistress

with skirts tucked in knickers waiting to be spanked

this go around will leave you breathless

with hearts colder than sucking devastation.

 

What if I slashed thighs where hand imprints led

curdled blood from the only point man "loved" about you

naive to karmas sting, as the dagger mutilates flickered tongues

deteriorating once thought of desires; you falter being.

 

Exhaling the normality of your days with physical taunts

this lifestyle now plays broken records of impossible

as whispering in your ears leaves a sweet echo of maniacal laughter

"Your nothing but a fake person, and a cheap whore"

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  • echo-ink
    June 18, 2008
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    OMG you have took the gold. FANTASTIC, you go forever, girl, just

    AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME


  • Desire gold member
    June 18, 2008

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    Oh My Word!!

    Oy! You took the prompt and ran with it

    Fanning yourself in moneys glow
    bloating of how easy it was to work what you are
    laying on the bed for every fat pig that couldn't get laid
    and the satisfaction of getting something, doesn’t mean your pretty;
    These lines grab~


    The images stun the Mind~ boy do they stain with
    dark Brilliance

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Nighttime angel
    June 17, 2008

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    I absolutely love where you took this prompt.. the darkness, the anger can felt through out this write. WOW. you blew me away. I've always loved your poetry, this time you've outdone yourself. I can feel the emotions through the entire poem. I was captivated by the first stanza and you didn't disappoint as I continued to read.. I love the last line of this brilliant poem..

    excellent job with both the poem and the prompt.

    good luck

    kat


  • Mark McNulty
    June 17, 2008

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    Wow. Very provocative in a dark, exciting, engaging kind of way. I loved this read, felt hooked right from those first lines. I am impressed. I especially loved the ending. It had a nice bite to it but also tied it up well for me. An excellent write and a highly enjoyable one. All my best...


  • Weltt
    June 17, 2008

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    This blew me away!!! Incredibly intense and a bit shocking in its bluntness but in a good way. Bitterness is embedded throught your words. Imagery here is fresh and vivid and grabs your attention, never letting go until the very end where it lingers lnog after. My favoirte stanza was the first one but they're all brilliant. Very well penned and best of luck Luna!!!


    -Dan

  • Nighttime angel
    June 16, 2008
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    http://vampirella87.deviantart.com/art/Passion-29512091

    try this one.. if you don't like you know what to do right? one more chance after that.


    kat


    • luna-midnight gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      can i see another mummy, and then decide...i have some ideas about that one but im not sure :/ lol
      sorry

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