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Unable To Stay, Unwilling To Leave

we held each other so tight i thought we would not be able to breath
we silently cried as we lay there in each others loving embrace
we talked about out past, how we felt about each other, and our future
we silently prayed for the night to last forever
knowing that the sun would tear us apart bringing only heartache
as your deployment gets nearer we hold each other closer
not once did we sleep that night talked and talked
trying not to let our fears get the better of us
every time we lapsed into silence
we still spoke to each other heart to heart
even when our arms were numb we never let go not once
even when we hand to go pee
we never stoped touching somewhere somehow
it was almost like we thought when you went to walk away
you would be leaving forever never coming back from IRAQ
we just layed there so close together wanting the feelings
to last us through the fifteen month deployment
our hearts twisted when we heard the alarm go off
i baried my head into your chest wanting so bad to beg you not to go
you squised me once more, silently whispering into my ear
"i know love i know i dont want to go either but know this i will love you forever"
i can still feel where you repeatedly kissed my forehead its as if you still are
i can still feel those strong arms of yours circling around my waist
i will be here patiently waiting your return if you promise to meet me

Author notes

VIOLET:
love
heals
everything
over
time

INDIGO:
camo

your too funny daughter in law



my last night with my engineer


what is love?

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  • Symphony
    February 21
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    Awh, I thought that this was going to be about Titanic, because that's the title of one of hte pieces on the soundtrack! But anyway -

    This came from the heart, I think? At least, it sounded like something you have been through, and, if it's a poem that you wrote from putting yourself in someone else's shoes, then bravo, you managed it very well!

    thanks for entering


  • takemypainaway
    August 25, 2008

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    this is somthing that i have been through 2 times and it does suck so bad... and you expressed it very well
    thank you for entering much love
    --kat


  • etoile
    August 14, 2008

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    the love is clearly present in this write
    its beautiful and sad that the guy has to go
    but you know he'll always love you.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 10, 2008

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    sometimes we have no choice, but it doesn't make it any easier to go... hell, goodbye is one of the hardest things to do...it really breaks you.


  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    June 23, 2008

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    this is a beautiful piece. I like it alot, the insight into your thoughts is so so ....for lack of a better word, great. Well done


  • Angelflower
    June 23, 2008

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    This is really beautiful in expresstion.. You did such a wonderful job in bringing the reader into your thoughts on that last night.. And the emotions I'm sure touched everyone that has read this..Thank you very much for sharing.. it was greatly enjoyed and I hope he comes back to you and the love is stronger then ever! best of luck in the contest..


    Angel


  • Mary Jane.
    June 22, 2008
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    awww. wifey It made me cry... you knew it would why do you do that to me?? Okay, how is it that we spent the last night with them like the exact same way (many many similarities) God, I love him and I miss him soo much
    Thanks for entering and good luck
    Sarah aka your favorite wifey


  • Dark Otter
    June 21, 2008

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    I envy you

    for having someone that loves you so deeply. I hope you share this soon with him. May your love withstand the separation of time and space.


  • Gypsie Ink
    June 20, 2008

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    Awwww....

    Emotional and deep. There are no words that can describe the depth of feeling in this situation...it is so hard. Thank you for sharing and entering and Best of luck....

  • Sun-shiney
    June 19, 2008
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    its okay it will be. im so sorry. mine is leaving for 11 years. hopefully he loves me enough to return

  • Sun-shiney
    June 19, 2008

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    *tears* i understand how u feel my boys moving half way across the country and the second last day was like that. and the last day we just cuddled. it still hurts so much. i don't want him to leave.


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    June 19, 2008
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    awwwwwww this is a tear jerker i loved it


  • PrincessOfDecent
    June 19, 2008
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    I really loved this, I can relate with this poem, I give you sixty thumbs up! ^^


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    I'm sorry hes leaving laura but he probably wont be gone for 15 months. Nost the units ave had their stays cut down already. Mark my words. but I'll pray for his safe return. Good job with the poem too. It was touching.


    • camo.egg.army.gurl
      June 16, 2008
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      he left for IRAQ June 8th...
      this was saturday night before he left

      his date he returns is in SEPTEMBER 2009...
      he is an engineer which is classified as one of the mos's that is needed for "rebuilding"
      i want him home


  • Nephlim
    June 16, 2008
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    Thank you for following the rules!

    So sad I'm sorry your husband had to leave but you did such a beautiful job describing your last moments together. So real and raw! Good luck!

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