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he walked away

i could no longer stand
as i watched him
walk right out of my life
i fell onto my knees
i know it was his choice
i know why he fights
i know why he joined
to be army strong
but i still can not help
but cry as i watched him
walk onto that damned bus!!
the deployment bus
that might not bring him home
in fifteen months time
i put my head into my hands
i could not bring myself
to watch him climb the stairs
i pulled my head up
as i felt his stare
i looked up to meet
his beautiful chocolate eyes
i saw the tears
racing down his check
i saw him put his hand
up against the glass
i found the strenght
somewhere
to get up off my knees
i walked towards him
i put my hand
up against the same window
i touched my lips
with my fingers
of my other hand
and pressed them
up against the window too
i fought my tears
i wanted so hard
to be brave
at least in his eyes
i did not want everyone
to see how weak
how small
he makes me feel
finaly the engine
began to rumble
i ran behind the bus
for a little while
and then i stoped
never did i lose
eye contact with him
i saw those tears
i felt his pain
i finaly let down
my barriers and cried
so he knew how much
i love him

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  • Symphony
    April 20

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    So much emotion within this one, it must have been so hard to stand there and let him walk away - I commend you for having the strength to do it, and also for writing about it.

    Thanks for sharing it with us.


  • Angelflower
    June 23, 2008

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    I really liked this.. there was intense emotion and imagery... It flowed really well and brought the reader into the moment.. Thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck...


    Angel


  • whiterabbit.
    June 17, 2008

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    aw, this is really sad but I like it. I can really feel the emotions here. I hope everything is okies with you. Thanks for entering


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    Its good laura but the short lines really distracts from the poem as it doesnt allow any sort of flow whatsoever. I believe though thatis what the other guys comment was about. There has to be some sort of flow to it.


  • scenescene
    June 16, 2008
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    nice one, a moving one but thhis is plain prose, where is poetry in it?


    • camo.egg.army.gurl
      June 16, 2008
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      what ya mean where's the poetry in it?
      not all poetry rhymes..
      some times its about creating an image in the readers mind..i recreated the image of watching him walk away and added how i felt along the way

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