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drinking a song

the trumpet
looked like a wine bottle,

chunked down
in the shadows




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Username: Flowered Keys

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  • Chocoholic156
    June 27, 2008

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    Interesting since there is not much there. I usually like more words, but anything works. The title tied everything together, so good job with that. Thank you for entering in my contest.


  • Melodies
    June 16, 2008
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    Smiling to see an eleven-year old using wine bottle imagery, for it is more usual to see words that children are used to consuming and playing with. Drinking a song is rather a barroom image, too. You must be a reincarnated poet from bygone days, Daisy. A lovely poem!