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Wait for me over the moon top

Please wait for me
Over the moon top
because I'm coming for you
So always look up

And if you don't wait
I'll just go faster
And meet you half way
As you try to look down

And if you give up
I'll be your shoulder
So go ahead and cry
And only let the tears fall

And if you don't trust me
I'll give you my heart
And tell you I love you
And it can be our stepping stool

And if you think your alone
I'll show you I care
And that I'll always be here
And I can be your hoist

And if you don't want me
I can still be your unused shoulder
And you can always count on me
So that you never look down

And if you do look up
I'll be smiling at you
And showing you the stars
Because they're your limit.

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Written-in-ink i hope you listen to this message.

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  • HereComesTheSun
    September 22, 2008

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    wow what a fantastic piece
    imagery was top notch
    idea was fabulous
    and greatly executed
    great work


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    And if you give up
    I'll be your shoulder
    So go ahead and cry
    And only let the tears fall

    everyone needs to hear this sometime in life. great write and good luck in the contest. thank you so much for entering


  • written-in-ink
    September 19, 2008

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    i hope that i do too

    this is amazing and wonderfully written thank you so much for sharing it with me

    and i am glad that you are willing to help

    thank you so much and good luck


  • Blooming Poet
    July 8, 2008

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    Okay first off this poem is pretty much amazing. The theme is something we all can relate to. But the littlee note at the bottom made it sound like it was okay to give up


  • Tercil gold member
    June 19, 2008

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    moon top needs something else put I feel, like moon quest of moon shadow, but this seems very much spiritual and now I feel the moon's haze would be appropriate,

    • Cena-of-Destiny
      June 20, 2008
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      Hm...

      Hm... interesting. If you could be a bit more specific, i'd really appreciate it, because i'm always willing to change it, since its what the readers get out of this that makes me happy.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 17, 2008
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    Aww what a beautiful and sincere poem you have penned here. So true in your thoughts; powerful message to never give up. You are right when you say there is always someone there to pick us up when we fall, even if it takes a while; someone is there.

    Lovely write!
    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    Excellent write

    Indeed for the heart will always have room for more love no matter what trail we have been lead down just look up and listen for love has such a lovely sound

    • Cena-of-Destiny
      June 17, 2008
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      thank you

      why thank you! i really wanted to reach out to those who thought they had no one, and that i'll always give a shoulder to those in need.

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