We met on a winter evening
The fire cast shadows on your face
The horror of it all,
was what built our affections
We danced in the forest,
moonlight leaking through the branches,
as snow poured from the trees, screaming
the start of our love was the end of the song.
Je saigne pour toi, tu saigne pour elle.
Author notes
5. Option 5.
Je saigne pour toi, tu saigne pour elle means I bleed for you, you bleed for her.
A contest entry
- Options Contest for the Creative Mind by chasingwhiterabbits.
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What be your thoughts?
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i ... i am not even going to say it...
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you've got talent
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You got skill, as if you didn't already know. Great poem.
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Thats beautiful. It really makes me think. I like it. Short, yes, but great imagery.
Good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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Amazing..
This is short but really sweet. I could picture everything in my head as i read. my favorite part is when you said "We danced in the forest, moonlight leaking through the branches" that was worded so good. Thanks for entering my contest. Wish you luck.
Shelly
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very interesting you did a good job of capturing love and suffering all in one there good luck in the contest
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very well done
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j'adore! j'adore! this is amazing!
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This is an interesting write, and I love the imagery you employ. I like the second stanza best, and the French is fitting.
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awsome
the 2nd paragraph is incredible
the french thing is cool 2
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a really creative poem. The poem seems like it is a personal one. good luck in the contest ~ glad I stopped by to read this. prettypoetry
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