A scallion framed you
inside green weaves
thin enough to show our light,
spiced by sharing
a hollow camera
I too would pop back to you
for a dime of a pupil
Our temples unwrapped
by the ear tunnel
are as glasses of relationship,
reading our minds in faint text
Once it shortens, I'll tell you
and drip my memory long
through this straw,
I taste you're listening
Author notes
hope this is deep, i was just playing around with neat ideas with the onion leaf; doing this, and the comparison process of writing came!
In a list
A contest entry
- People under 14--Be Deep! by myusikah.
450 points, ended June 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what did you feel I expressed?
Comments
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I like this. This is really cool. Interesting! Onion leaf. That is deep. If only you played a little bit more emotion into it, it'd be much better!
Good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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