O wondrous world that comes to me
as I lay down upon my bed.
Magical things these dreams may be.
A fairyland beyond the sea
with pixies dancing in my head;
O wondrous world that comes to me.
This special place where I may flee
with luscious treats before me spread.
Magical things these dreams may be.
I rule this land and I decree
that no harsh words will e'er be said.
O wondrous world that comes to me.
A joyous vision that I see;
the charming prince someday I'll wed.
Magical things these dreams may be.
The daylight ends my reverie,
and all my fantasies I shed.
O wondrous world that comes to me.
Magical things these dreams may be.
Author notes
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
In a list
A contest entry
- Winklings and Allpoetry Friends. #99 Fantasy Worlds by Lyndon.
3000 points, ended July 25, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Poetic Bandits Magic Contest by Miss Faerie.
1000 points, ended June 1, 10 entries
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Comments
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A Delightful and polished Villanelle, it is obvious that you must have spent some time crafting this poetic gem. The imagery is invigorating. Well done!
Write On!
Brother Dennis
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Bandit Contest Entry
An interesting, magical piece. Excellent easy flow that was a pleasure to read and really quite beautifully done.
Thank you for entering our bandit contest and good luck
Shari
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A lovely Villanelle, I'm going to visit your Fairy land in a minute, because it's 1.41am overhere and I have to get up early for a photo shoot in the country. I'll be dreaming of fairies, I'm sure.
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This Villanelle is a delight to read. If only, hey? I'd love to visit it in my dreams every night for a refresher of love and kindness...with no harsh words....Mmmmm... *drifts off into a starry-eyed reverie*
Thanks for sharing this beauty.
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Wonderful villanelle. So pleased to see a shiny trophy on this gem. Excellent. Congratulations. ~Pamela
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A sweet villlanelle, poet.
I'd guess a woman wrote this; not that that matters!
Dream country is the stuff of fantasy.
Thank you fot entering this contest.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Quite well done with the Villanelle which is not an easy form to keep flowing. You have done a fie job here with dreamland and dreams being a fantasy land.
I enjoyed this very much. Best of luck in the judgig. ~Pamela
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I thought this was a cute piece. Thank you for entering the contest. I hope you had fun writing for this contest.
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Good
I enjoyed sharing what was in your fairyland. Good read
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Thank you for explaining what a Villanelle is in your authors notes This is a new form for me to appreciate and learn. I enjoyed reading this poem Since I am not yet "well versed" Ha Ha on this form I don't think I am qualified to comment any than I have
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A well crafted villanelle. Magical and whimsical. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is lovely, and gives such a sense of joy and fragile perfection, knowing it must end... *sigh*... I thought this was a wonderful use of the form!
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