Journeying through life
As nothing but a child, a drop of water in an ocean
Living each day as if there won't be another
Mother, can you see? Can you help?
Nothing seems to be going right, and everything's a mess
Killing me from the inside out
Reality's a shocker
Please, mother, I've given my all
Everything I had
For him
Author notes
J A L M N K R P E F
A contest entry
- I start it for you :) by peridotPixi.
440 points, ended June 19, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow This was great. I wish i could write like this.
..<3.
Shelly -
interesting
hmm you did well with a set up
the theme stayed in tune and didnt seem like you had too much trouble writing this -
i love the deep feelings you have put into this poem, i love the detials an the plea for help, i love the reality is a schocker part its so true and hard for some people to grasp, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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J A L M N K R P E F
have fun
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