You filthy little
Rotten whore
Coming back
Begging for more
You tore up the earth
You tore down some lives
And yet you want ME by your side?
All you want is my body my lips
Girl you're so dim you're a solar eclipse
Spreading some shit about who did what
Bull drips from your mouth
Like from your nose your snot
Just the pure sight of you
Wants to make me puke
Get together?
You're having a joke!
You know what?
Stuff it!
I FUCKING HATE YOU!
Regards
Marc
Tell me what you think, I really do want some honest feedback
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honest feedback? it's rubbish to be brutally honest. Marc, i really believe deep down you'd be better off writing a blog or something like that, something you can equally pour your emotions into...without all this attempted poetry.
Poetry needs continuity, it needs purpose and structure, and above all else it requires a writers' undivided attention when being written. I'm sorry Marc, but the last few poems (especially this one) are just so forced...it's painful to read mate.
May I ask who the poem is about? Seems like somebody certainly pissed you off.
David
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