From the first moment we met I knew you were different
I knew I loved you in that instant
But I didn't expect to be hurt so bad
I didn't know I could feel so much pain....
It was a long summer night
May 17th to be exact
everything just seemed to be going so right
yet it happened so fast...
I was outside with a few of my friends
Not knowing that soon our love would come to an agonizing end....
The moon was full, beautiful and bright
The stars gave off the luminous grace
we had just been in our first lover's quarrel
that night...
I got so puset I threw your picture away
something that I'll never forget,
something that I'll always regret....
Our words were twisted and cruel
Our yells were vicous and loud
Our voices were bitter and unfeeling
but who ever thought that I would lose you
forever?
May 17th a day filled with anger
a night filled with tears
as I picked up the phone
and heard your mother crying in my ears...
"She's gone...she's gone."
the screaming went on...
My one true love
taken away
bitter memories and pain stayed...
May 17th on the hospital bed
doctors and nurses pronouncing you dead...
Sweet baby angel if only you knew
Nine years later and I'm still in love with you
Time has lapsed; stood frozen
Since that pathway you've chosen...
My heart is still broken
A million pieces more
every year there's a tear
for the pain that I feel
every year there's a tear
because it's still real
every summer there's a candle lit
in the cemetery down by the bay
to try and bring you back bit by bit
but all is hopeless since we know
we lost you that day.....
the police report read
"Suicide; another teen dead"
through everything we had
I didn't know it was this bad
May 17th tears are still shed....
being with you made my poetry
made my inspiration rise
filled my heart with joy
put smiles on my face
now every summer
I piece of me is lost; forgotten with time
every May 17th I remember that
you are no longer mine......
Author notes
Collasped Heart {with an ache true and painful} option 3
for R.M. rest in peace
i live for those who can't
A contest entry
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crystal, this is so...i don't know what to say!! it's is beautifully written, who is it about? how do i know nothing about this when obviously it has had such an impact on you?!!
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this is pretty emotional and does a good job of eliciting the tragic nature of the topic. it really does make me sad to read this, and i can feel how much pain you have within you radiating through this, but it's too basic for me. it's extremely straight-forward and literal, which just isn't really my taste. thanks for entering
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I FELT EVERY WORD
VERY SAD
FULL OF HEARTBREAK AND EMOTION,
VERY CHILLING,
MY HEART TO YOU!
GOD BLESS...
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this is so beautiful and sad it is an inspiration to all
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Totally relatable
Good luck. -
this is very powerful crystal nicely done
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The Second Poem I've Read,
And I'm In Beyond My Tears...
My uncle....on May 10th of this year....comitted suicide...
- this brought back so many memories,
and my heart aches for your loss.......it truly does...
I wasn't expecting to cry like this...
But you managed to pull it out of me..
..a heart breaking .. but beautiful write,
by one outstanding poet..
My Heart Goes Out To You,
Along With Many Many Prayers..
All The Luck To You In This Contest,
~*SL*~ -
...Wow
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