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Apocrypha

Beneath a blue-green liquid sky, in a world of solitude,
akasha runes written on the sands are seldom viewed.
Knowledge of the universe inscribed in dancing light
lie tantalizingly close to us but kept from our sight.

Revealed in meaning only to the mammals of the deep,
stories of creation, tales to make one weep.
Not for human understanding, we turned away eons before
denying our primeval roots as we crawled up on the shore.

Forgotten wisdom left behind in our need to roam.
Patiently, it lies there awaiting our return to home.

Author notes

Only two "dictionary words" (LOL)
apocrypha : secret, hidden, of unknown orgin
akasha : ethereal

The ocean was the womb of all life and the record of all time is imbued in its
atoms… As of 2008, less than 10% of all oceans have been explored. What secrets still lie undiscovered?

Prompt: B A K L R S N D F P (write a ten line poem using the letters I gave you (in the order given) as the first letter in each line)
Picture Credit: http://neic.deviantart.com/art/Underwater-40737348
10 lines

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  • peridotPixi
    June 18, 2008

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    i really love this, its cool i love the beautiful picture you have put with your great peom and i love the way you have worded the prompt, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy


  • daviscth silver member
    June 18, 2008

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    What awesome words to go with the picture!!! I really like that you included the meaning to the words, that's a great help with reading this. Good luck to you.


  • jackreed3 gold member
    June 17, 2008
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    you are on a Roll... JackReed3


  • crimsondew
    June 17, 2008
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    Wonderful poem...nice theme..Learnt 2 new words even...Enjoyed this much..
    All the best!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Beautifully done Ken.. a write that inspires.. because yes, who knows what is left to be discovered and what more we can learn...

    Excellent write!


  • Lucy.
    June 16, 2008

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    Goodness! I thoroughly enjoyed this poem anyway, and didn't realise until after you that you had been working within the letter limitations. Fantastic job! Good luck in the contest.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Well well aren't we the wise one! Ofcourse YOU can pull off anything. Great job on this!


    • KayJay
      June 16, 2008
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      Wise... what did you say? ()... Thank you for kind comments...


  • Livingemptyspaces
    June 16, 2008

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    Wow, you did an amazing job with working inside the limitations, and pulled off a fantastic, deep poem. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    -Les


    • KayJay
      June 16, 2008
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      Thank you... Appreciate the encouragement and the kind comments...
      Ken


  • peridotPixi
    June 16, 2008
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    B A K L R S N D F P

    have fun

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