The yellow of the sand
The blue of the sky
The deep colour of the ocean
makes me wonder why
Lifes the way it is
With its rises and falls
A supreme God who
Looks down on us all
With his all knowing mind
Sees millons dying
Whilst countless others
Succeed by lying.
He created a species
Controlled by greed
And I really think
I don't see the need
From Vietnam and before
Right up until Iraq
I'd find God and ask
'What's the crack?'
Millions through history
Killed in vain
And why you ask,
Mostly in your name
One person's God is better than anothers
So lets all go to war
Because I'm sure God would be
impressed by what he saw
We've used the brains we were given
and used them to create death
Shall we continue this practice
Until theres nothing left?
Maybe God is real
Maybe he's not
But either way
There's something we've forgot:
The rules from these books
That from so many teach
Love thy neighbour
Maybe we should practise what we preach.
Author notes
not really what I had in mind when I started writing, but it's different n I thought I'd share it as I havnt posted any for ages!!
Please tell me what you think
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pressed the button before the applauds lol silly me, so im afraid this is a bit of a pointless message lol
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ooo dude that well thought provocking like it how you get ppl to think wether or not god is real and for the ones that do love it how youve ended it on a commandment that even ppl who are not religous no ... i think its time for this too, i mean fine have your relgion but dont go to war over it and stuff why cant people just get a long! wud be nice. but really like the way its written, top part is especially beautifully done! check you! catch ya soonio chick. hope ya all good. xx
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Wow, fantastic writte
This is totaly amazing, is good to see some more poetry ducky. I really like the message you are giving through this poem, i totaly agree. nice references really bringing your message alive. The ending is also genious
well done you
loves it
xxx
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I don't believe in God.
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Great Poem
Your words are so true. If only everyone would follow the golden rul and the ten ammandments. Sounds so easy but seems so hard to do for so many. You take care. Wonderful Poem!!!!
Bless You,
Sandy
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With it's rises and falls - no need for an apostrophe here with it's as that is saying it is. its is better used.
Mostly in YOUR name - peronally i think no need for the YOUR
a good poem with a good message, forgive me please for pointing out mad ones, i am not attacking as most tend to think but i am trying to smile with education.
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You are certainly not alone in your thoughts, from the time of man's beginning he has been a paradox. We are told that God said 'thou shalt not kill' yet no-one seems to be listening.
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These are thoughts I've often wondered and thus I am able to relate to this piece very well. I actually became an theist because I can not reconcile myself with the belief that some kind of divine plan requires so much horror and death on a daily basis. But that isn't the point. Critically, the rhyme scheme did not come through a few times, and there were a couple of spelling errors, but your message still came through strongly. Good work.
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Great job. The poem asks a question that has been asked repeatedly since the beginning of religion. The answer is usually that he gave human's free choice.
Does someone succeed whilst lying? I think this depends upon how one measures success.
I loved the poem. You asked a question and framed it well without it turning into a simple rant.
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this is a very good write from you and speaks so many of my thoughts. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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this has a nice flow and philospoy matter to it, great write and good luck
take care
stephanie
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