Every day I send a thousand kisses
To match each one of your thousand coldest glares.
Nothing in your sparkling eyes
Betrays your ever loving lies.
Love is silent, love is swift
Love, where in this life we drift
With utmost passion, catches souls
And dazzles them with all her ghouls.
You, phantasm! Ghost of my dreams!
Shadow of the unredeemed!
No illusion can beguile
Like that specter of your smile.
Reverence came, but bliss was far
The soul still lingers near the star.
Enamored once, I look at them
Oh! It was all but a whim.
Author notes
Option 3, bank 2. I used all of them.
Haven't done a rhyming poem in a long time! Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Options Contest for the Creative Mind by chasingwhiterabbits.
700 points, ended June 20, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Thats really good. I like the 3-4th lines. The beginning of the stanza. I think that it could have been better, a little longer. Thanks for entering and good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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it is a gr8 poem it is just not what i'm looking for
i can't feel the emotion.....
thanx 4 entering though
o and the rhying is wonderful!
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Good job ...
I usually don't like lost love poems, but this one isn't bad. Congrats on the trophy too.
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Really good, i like the two beginning lines a lot and its consistent all the way through. For me it really captures the feeling of being ensnared by someone who is out of reach.
No illusion can beguile
Like that specter of your smile
Great lines, she really does sound like an awful cow though!!
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Well actually, "he", since I'm a girl.
I'm glad you liked it and could understand it... thanks for the compliment!
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Automatically a finalist. I really adore the way you used all the words here in such a magical way.
"You, phantasm! Ghost of my dreams!
Shadow of the unredeemed!"
Favorite part. This is my favorite write so far. Thank you for entering.
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