Emblazoned across the sky,
Are my memories of past
Twirling
Swirling
In a burst of color and light
Mesmerizing my mind
To see my own
Personal
Past
Faces flash by
Bringing a smile
For the memories
Never to be forgotten
In the swirl of darkness
In the sky I see it
A collage of who I am
Ripped in places
Gold in others
I can’t say I’ve mastered life
But my collage
Is my soul’s masterpiece
Imperfect
Emblazoned across the sky
Is my life of past
Exciting
Inviting
To go back
But behind the sky
I reach up, to create my own
Personal
Future
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Awesome
This poem is amazing! I can't eveen begin to describe it. I loved the part where you said that your collage is ripped in some places and gold in others and I really like the ending too. I love this poem so much I can't even describe it! -
This is really great. I love this poem.
"Emblazoned across the sky,
Are my memories of past
Twirling
Swirling
In a burst of color and light"
That was my favorite part in the poem! great job keep it up!!
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wow, a lot of this was so strong! the first line "emblazoned across the sky" is very powerful and visual and it really set the scene for the rest of the poem. i get a feeling of temporary memories not just by the content but also by the structure of you poem, short choppy lines and small stanzas. i also love "a collage of who i am/ripped in places/gold in others/i can't say i've mastered life..." just beautiful. great job!
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beautiful imagery in this one!! i love the line about the collage being your soul's masterpiece...beautiful write!
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I LOVE THIS!!!
Beautifully written. I was captivated from begining to end. We learn and draw from our pasts in order to build a better future. Today you have gained a fan.
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Ditto to what the prevous have said, theres not much else I can say!
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This is awesome. really good.
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encouraging
I have no idea way but i find this poem encouraging. It's a beautiful piece.
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