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Haiku - Sunset

Between wolf and dog
sun sinks fiery teeth into
far horizon’s fog.

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Between Dog and Wolf ... literally timespan between dawn and dusk - thus here between dusk and dawn
French : Entre chien et loup
from Latin : Inter canem et lupum


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  • Broken-Bones
    July 13

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    To me a sunset is an enchanting thing and you really seem to capture the magic of the moment, which is amazing in so few words. I thought this was a really clever Haiku which leaves a clear image with its reader. I loved the first line and found it intelligent and captivatiing. Congratulations on such a wonderful piece.

  • DARKsmith gold member
    July 7

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    GREAT****

    This is a very special poem. I love the metaphoric thought you put into and behind your words. The imagery in line#2 is my favorite part, as I can picture the sharp teeth of a wolf blazing as it pierces into the darkness and disappears.
    The title, 'Sunset' works so well because you describe the sun's descending in a very unique perspective. Without the title present it takes a piece away from the puzzle and would be a bit more difficult to determine the meaning.

    Overall, this is a very great haiku.

  • BorntothePurple
    July 7

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    Interesting metaphor. I didn't fully understand the "wolf and dog" depiction until I read your notes. I like the metaphor though. Night is dark and dangerous, like a wolf- day is safe and familiar, like a dog. Yet they are essentially the same type of 'animal' two sides of the same creature. As dogs and wolves are very similar and in fact the same species genetically. I'm reading into this quite a bit- but I love how the idea stands up to scrutiny, and how this poem made me think. Great background too.

  • jaded teardrop
    July 4

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    jaded teardrop

    This is a really good poem. It had a lot of great imagery. Most haiku poems that i have read do not rhyme but this does, and it is really cool. great job!!

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  • crazymomma
    July 4

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    "sun sinks fiery teeth into
    far horizon’s fog." I just love the imagery created by these lines. Just imagining the sun with teeth makes it seem so much more 'alive'.

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  • pania gold member
    June 27

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    Very unusual haiku, in that it uses personification, assonance and rhyme. However, the image presented is strong, almost violent, and has a great impact.

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  • sad-eyed anime girl
    June 16

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    awesome! i love it. well, i love haikus in general, but yours is really good.
    it RHYMES! very cool.

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