{she’s a broken piece of d r e a m s,
wondering why Discovery Channel never showed
the e-y-e-l-i-n-e-r smears as she c r i e s
how she believed in Disney fairy.tale l o v e }
{I’m a shattered piece of d r e a m s}
and you want me to tell you how you make me
[feel].
baby the answer is in the [glass] shards on the sheets;; my heart lies
in pieces with the champagne, broken in the [death]bed we [sort of]
slept in.
[I hope they cut you the next time you lie down with the next Barbie
|slut| girl;; but love, I swear on every tear I’d never want to hurt you,
so I’ll quit with the drama.queen.{played by innocent-whore} and give
you everything you{ask?} for]
There’s b e a u t y in the b.r.e.a.k.d.o.w.n.,
every {{Miss.America}} has a meltdown,
p.a.i.n is b e a u t y ;; now shut up and [lie] down.
the reason I can never believe you when you say I’m *p*e*r*f*e*c*t*::
because I turn to the mirror and wonder what part of red eyes and
blemishes spells ‘pretty’, and you kissed the carved.red.letters
{{whorewhorewhore}} onto my {{violated}} breasts that {flashback}
to me every night.. And if you could show me what the storybooks
saw in this t r a g e d y , maybe I could give you what you want
without the t e a r s t a i n s .
And you tell me I make a great piece of d.i.r.t.y [pretty], but I know all that means is that I’m the next p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s [fuckup.]
{so cut the crap and screw the whore}
<3
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A contest entry
- Give Me Love[[Tainted]] by edit my world..
525 points, ended July 22, 2008, 34 entries
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425 points, ended July 11, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Another great write!!! My favorite part is "the reason I can never believe you when you say I’m *p*e*r*f*e*c*t*:: because I turn to the mirror and wonder what part of red eyes and
blemishes spells ‘pretty’,"
and"There’s b e a u t y in the b.r.e.a.k.d.o.w.n.,
every {{Miss.America}} has a meltdown,
p.a.i.n is b e a u t y ;; now shut up and [lie] down."
This poem has so much emotion and is amazing. Glad you got a trophy for it because your poem definetly deserved it
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I used to believe in pretty things like that... then I grew up & it's a shame, I wish I never did. Winnie the Pooh had better morals than real life, it's all gray shades instead of black & white.
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woah. Talk about breath taking.
And you tell me I make a great piece of d.i.r.t.y [pretty], but I know all that means is that I’m the next p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s [fuckup.]
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gorgous. I don't think that's the right word for this poem, but oh well... it's a beautiful tragedy.
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Honestly, most of the punctuation just felt unnecessary; I know excessive, "embellishing" punctuation is part of the dirty pretty style, but do you even have a reason for using it ad nauseum? It's just a personal preference of mine, though.
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***There’s b e a u t y in the b.r.e.a.k.d.o.w.n.,
every {{Miss.America}} has a meltdown,
p.a.i.n is b e a u t y ;; now shut up and [lie] down.***
I love this.
Thanks for entering.
♥ Finalist ♥
Keira
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eeek.
this is brilliant. -
'baby the answer is in the [glass] shards on the sheets;; my heart lies
in pieces with the champagne, broken in the [death]bed we [sort of]
slept in.'
and...
'And you tell me I make a great piece of d.i.r.t.y [pretty], but I know all that means is that I’m the next p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s [fuckup.]'
Those lines stood out to me so much, the whole piece was just like wow, but those lines were like jumping on me... in a good way
I loves this.
*Bookmarks*
♥
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i think my points say enough lol good fuckn job!
xoxo- christina
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camılle...
wowwwww...
es muy muy muy (dark) ııı forgot how to say that ın spanısh *crıes*
ı lıked everythıng excetp the fırst begınıng lınes (the whole dıscovery channel thıng)
but thats pretty much ıt.
AMAZING WRITE!!!!
mel
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This is amazing. Very Powerful, you put your emotions into every word.
And you tell me I make a great piece of d.i.r.t.y [pretty], but I know all that means is that I’m the next p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s [fuckup.]
{so cut the crap and screw the whore}
These few lines say so much. Wonderful write.
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Wow. That was full of the most powerful statements I've heard in poetry. So much emotion seeped through the computer screen with this one. I can feel it in my heart. I loved the way you also experimented a bit with the style and form. Very clever how some things were in parenthesis. I hope you truly don't feel this way. I know I do sometimes and it's very hard to deal with. You just got to sometimes take what other people say into consideration and maybe think that what you see in the mirror is just a reflection of what you see, not what is real. Great piece. and keep on writing
Sincerely,
ModernXTimes
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