There's no words to describe this place-
No preparement,
No training,
No way to have known what was coming.
The enemy shoots with fire in eyes
And dead souls above their breast-
The scarriest thing is
I see myself in them.
This is the hell
Where saviors and beasts collide,
Each army believing they are the hero.
This is the land where peace means terrorism
And safety is death for the opponet.
This is the place humanity dies
For the sake of humanity.
Author notes
rough draft....
Please tell me what you think
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Your thoughts and imagery are very realistic...Polished...it will be great!
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thanks so much
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You have expressed yourself very well in this poem. I enjoy the approach that you have taken. It is a great draft.
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Wow....
....wow. I'm speechless....wow. This is a disterbing write. But in a good way I assure you! "I see myself in them." Such truth. Such honesty. And then the last two lines just have that POW factor! Truly superb write! Awesome Job!
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Well thank you very much!!!! That means a lot; this is the first piece I've written in awhile and actually liked haha. Thanks again!
Kara
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