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Jeweled love.

Missing image

I cried diamonds

when you scratched

my ruby heart,

peered through emerald eyes

when you flashed your

new gem.

 

I lay awake

on saphere nights

when the moon was opal

and opaquely dull.

 

You are a mystic topaz

kind of guy

changing as the mood suits,

I shine day or night...

 

Even when scratched.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • stavykm gold member
    July 22

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    Excellent

    This is beautiful and I loved how you used precious gems as part of your imagery and deeper meaning in your poem. What a lovely man to think upon with the words you penned so beautifully here. Congradulations on the silver.
    Many Blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie


  • nature mithya gold member
    June 22
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    Those are lovely words.

    And beautifully said.A real Honest person at heart and soul.
    Congrats.


  • Bluebutterfly8044
    June 21

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    I was impressed with the use of jewels in the poem
    although you misspelled sapphire in the second stanza.
    I really enjoyed this write. Good luck in the contest.


  • IanG silver member
    June 18

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    Cleverly getting the message across

    The use of gem stones to illustrate love and rejection is well done. Loved the emerald eyes piece. Could visualize the jealousy when the new gem was sighted. But there is something resiliant in the last lines. You are a survivor come what may. Excellent!


  • Pisces Pieces
    June 17

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    You have given unique meaning to gems, giving them power. I in the fact that although the heart may be wounded, it will still shine and no one can take away the beauty and strength.

    ♥


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 16
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    P.S.

    Gorgeous imagery here!!!

  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 16

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    Beautiful, yet sad and lonely...

    You're worthy of much than a scratched diamond. Good luck in the contest, I smell gold!!! Peace & Love to ya, Cyn


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 16
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    Love, C


  • Sagerider
    June 15
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    I Love it.

    You are so talented.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 15
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    ...and this shows how well you shine.


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    June 15

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    Life has many facets. I enjoyed reading this. Have missed your words. So nice to see you back. Juls

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