I hide between the curtains,
I run around in circles
I chase falling stars and then stand still
And wait for time to pass me by
I make snow angels and follow shadows
In a dream I hear you say that this is it
All the words that you said float around me
Weave in through my brain, into made up stories
Then I wake up, lonely
I eat breakfast, watch rain roll down the windows
Mum says things, I reply seconds too late
I’ve paused to see if you’ll interrupt,
But then I remember you’re not here
We’re all smiles, rainbows and wilted flowers
We drive to school in silence, radio chirping
I get out, say goodbye,
And walk up those three flights of stairs
Mum asks how I’m doing
She doesn’t know you’re gone yet
I’m fine mum, really
Really really really
Say it till you believe it
Raise your hand and wave it high
Don’t start crying
Or you’ll drown in your tears
I open my mouth to tell her you’re gone,
but she blabbers on about the new shopping center
At school, they all talk
Whispers follow me around, around me till I suffocate
Panic sets in when I can’t breathe
And lights swirl in front of my eyes
I count backwards till I can see clear again
At school I’m a No One, a loner by myself
The friends I once had stopped talking to me when I wouldn’t answer back
The words they said fell between us, shriveled up and died
Mother says she knows
She knows that you left
I try to breathe but the air gets caught on something
Shock fills me, enters my heart and burst into flames
Heat radiates through my body
A fire in my blood
We begin to talk about you
The layers of this onion
Are being pulled away
I know that this won't be easy
And the tears from you will still fall
A fire in my blood,
My heart will still beat
Author notes
This is based on a story I wrote for English. The story is actually about a girl with an imaginary friend, but I decided not to make that so clear in my poem.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is amazing. This s very well penned, you said what you needed to say and you said it well.. Great story as well.
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Nice incorporation of imagery.
Well done, well done.
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THat is a very good vent. I like this. Fire in your blood. Lonely fire, that is. Good Luck!
-->pia♫♪
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I have lost friends and whether imaginary or not, the sentiment you express remains the same--and you do a great job of expressing it. One suggestion might be to watch the use of "you" in the third stanza, because most of the time you are talking about the friend who has left, but there you are referring to your speaker's own mind...
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yayayay i read that story, i dont think i ever got to read the end though. its good
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This is really great and creative
work here. I love the longing in
this. For some people, an imaginary
friend is all that they have. It's
like a child and his teddy bear. When
things suddenly go wrong and there isn't
anyone around to listen and understand,
your imaginary friend is always there to
help ease the pain within.
Very creative and well thought out.
I really enjoyed reading this one.
Thanks a lot for sharing it here and
all the best to you with it in this
contest!
Jeremy0826
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