Your eyes have grown
distant, no longer
seeing me. The inertia
of indifference is all
that remains.
Then, your lips touch mine
and my reason flees
in lyrical dissonance…
only the beat of my
heart and the music
dancing along wanton
nerves remains…
Feelings of ecstasy
carved out of ice.
Author notes
Prompt: "Close your eyes when you kiss me, so I don't see the lies that live there"
Picture Credit: http://hepgerl.deviantart.com/art/the-kiss-8134031
30 to 50 words
A contest entry
- Prompt 10 entries/ 30 to 40 words by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended June 25, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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I really love this one
the last line hits hard, very well done
thank you and good luck
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good luck in the contest kayjay!!!!! this is short and great!! i love the title!!!! awesome picture!!!!!! this is realy truely amazing peice rite here. it says alot and its powerful and i love it kayjay!!!!!
its just great!!!!!
like i said good luck in the contest!!!
lol srry hyper
SilverWolf
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Great Poem... Your are the best...
good luck on the contest...
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What a take on this prompt. Absolutely brilliant. Other words forsake me.
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Chalk another one up to brilliance..You my dear are on a roll that only keeps getting better!! Amazing mind you have there Ken!
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Wonderful! Interesting contest theme, which you handled with great talent. You just don't write any junk!
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Wow! Good one!
(In an ouch, I know about this one, kind of way) 
Well done! Good luck in the contest.
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