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Inner Spirit -Villanelle

 

Many are the sounds of nature’s song

Listen to them and your worries compress

Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong

 

Birds join in the chorus and chirp along

Their gentle voice your soul will caress

Many are the sounds of nature’s song

 

Here is where I know I belong

Troubled forces within decompress

Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong

 

Dancing for me as they sing their birdsong

Calmed within I do confess

Many are the sounds of nature’s song

 

Peaceful is this life all summer long

Refreshing is the cool breeze nevertheless

Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong

 

Beauty of this day I try to prolong

Lifted up once again I fill to obsess

Many are the sounds of nature’s song

Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong

 

 

 

Author notes

This is an assignment for Refrain Class

The Villanelle rhyme scheme
A1 b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1 A2

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  • Ronztrek
    July 12, 2008

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    Absolutely

    "Here is where I know I belong
    Troubled forces within decompress
    Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong"

    And that is exactly what this magnificent piece has done for me, a read I so earnestly needed to hear. I really loved this poem, food for my soul
    Thank you so dearly for sharing.

    Ron


    • freespirit51
      July 12, 2008
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      Ronztrek

      I am so glad that this touched your heart. Always feel free to come back and read anytime.


  • raggyann
    June 21, 2008
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    i can hear music as i read this wonderful poem my friend
    it should be a song
    to me i feel


    • freespirit51
      June 21, 2008
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      raggyann

      Again my friend I thank you. Glad to see you enjoyed it.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 17, 2008

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    for within Mother Nature is the truest songs of life to be found...the birds hold the highest notes and the most beautiful sounds on Gods green Earth...Niaish my sweet sister for sharing such beauty with menemehotatse always

    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      Tender Wolf

      Sweet Sister I am glad you enjoyed this. Your words mean more than I can say. You are my teacher when it comes to nature.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    this is wonderful, great write and wonderful job with that form, i admit i like the bg too lol
    but lovely job and keep it up
    take care
    stephanie


    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      luna-midnight

      Thanks for your terrific words. Glad you enjoyed.


  • simpliciti
    June 16, 2008

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    well, certainly

    well certainly you received a high grade for this assignment! It's very well done and has a most important message to communicate to us all...congrats! and keep up the grrrreat work! all the best


    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      simpliciti

      Thanks for the confidence but only recieved 5out of 10. Tough teacher...glad it touched you though.


  • frownsnfreckles
    June 16, 2008

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    a rather gorgeous read to start the day. Full of positive emotion and cool refrains to ease the heart. I liked the form and thought the background was lovely, well suited to the mood and tone of the poem.

    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      frownsnfreckles

      So glad my poem started your day off so well. It was a pleasure to write it and to know that you enjoyed it as well.


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 16, 2008

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    awesomee ur background amazed me first and the villanelle is simply speechless so amazing well writtten i liked everything about it this is high class poetry and worthy of being published i adore it loadssss

    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      Poetry-and-rhyme

      Thanks so much for your terrific compliment. I am glad you enjoyed bothe the background I created as well as the poem. I was outside my house listening and watching as I was writing it.


  • arafura gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    "Here is where I know I belong
    Troubled forces within decompress
    Feel as the inner spirit becomes strong..."

    Lovely poem poet!

    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      arafura

      So glad you enjoyed this piece as well my friend. It was an interesting piece to write as I was experincing it as I was writing it.


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    June 15, 2008

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    Well Done

    One with nature. I could see the sun's rays warm me from the inside out as I walked with you through this. I really enjoyed my visit & I did not want to go. But reality hit me. Thank you for sharing, such a uplifting poem. A place I love & feel as one is with nature all around me guiding me. In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~


    • freespirit51
      June 19, 2008
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      Iridessa

      Thanks and I am so glad you enjoyed it. It was an interesting piece to write as well.


  • Dishy
    June 15, 2008

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    Excellent

    took me for a wlk in the sunshine hearing the birds sing .Really lovely .I have a friend that is not well at the moment and I think this will pick her spirits up too .

    • freespirit51
      June 15, 2008
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      Dishy

      Glad to hear it hel[ed pick up your spirits. I wrote this while sitting outside in my yard and playing flute music. Sems the birds enjyed it as well as they sang to me.

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