with ease,
off come my shoes
then socks, with tee-shirt next
after dropping my jeans and shorts;
you laugh!
A Cinquain
Author notes
Haha
In a list
A contest entry
- Cinquain by Yemassee.
554 points, ended June 21, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I may not laugh at you..but you would laugh at me..then we might both be laughing..naked..does that sound fun? Probably not..maybe so..lol Naked has two syllables
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Haha, very funny. How dare they laugh at your undress. This would be quite embarassing. Good cinguain and good luck in the contest.
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A good write and skillfully crafted Cinquain. Enjoyed the humor. The picture you painted with you words is well done. Best wishes in the contest.
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Surely, you jest,
or maybe not!
A revealing piece!
Aesthete
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wonderful!~
hahahaha
this is really funny.
a good cinquain
best of luck in the contest!!~~
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lol You always know just how to lead the reader to a questionable thought lol
Excellent Cinquain!
Good luck to you in the contest!
Jasminerose
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Yeah ...
I agree ... some good humor shared with this one and it was nice for you to lighten up the load of serious submissions (to include mine) with this one! YOu must know Yemassee better than I do to know that he would appreciate humor! joy
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I almost wrote a love cinquain...but after a brief moment of revelation...what came to mind...was the downside to a sensual moment gone bad
thanks for commenting...I couldn't help myself
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A Shocking Cinquain of horror!
Could there be a worse fate than dropping the clothes, thinking a good time was to be had and instead the gal laughs?!
My kind of cinguain, humor my thing. Well it isn't mine, I don't own it, but I do enjoy it.
I'm glad you entered it in the contest.
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Imma funny guy...well endowed
except where it really counts....LOL well errrrrrrr it could be worse.... if she pointed and laughed HAHA
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so much fun to read! lol.
I'd never laugh, honest.
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Liar
LOL...especially when the sock falls out
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lol! ooops!
I like this
Love, Lane
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