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Fear of love

I feel if I steal

just one kiss

you would suck the life from me

then swallow me whole

to swim around your veins

and suffocate

in your eternity 

.

The fear of living

inside your collective thoughts

sends every borrowed dream drowning

awkwardly inside the shadow

of a slow death 

.

I do want to be fearless;

walk barefoot over Damascus swords

and freefall through humanity

as the wind massacres my soul 

.

but that is not who I am 

.

        The band, strangles me still

        but stays wrapped

        around each heartbeat,

        the weight of its protection

        weakening my rationality

.

If I could leap across infinity

I know I would fly

but when I get to the edge

and look into the gulf of indigo

it is at that moment

I am totally consumed with the fear,

of loving you

as I do.

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  • individuality gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    the fear of living, i guess we all have that, we want to lay a kiss on the lips of life but are too scared to go for it sometimes, i know the one. i like that imagery - the gulf of indigo, that is really good


  • enitsirhC
    June 21, 2008

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    Wow.

    I really like the imagery, and you have a wonderful vocabulary

    Very well done!

    Good luck in your contest!


  • angel0monica
    June 21, 2008
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    its nice its a beutiful write good job


  • bren-
    June 21, 2008
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    I enjoy your words, this is very well writte

  • pruedence
    June 21, 2008

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    Love can be a scary thing if you don't watch your steps. But if you are with the right person you may loose out on things by being so fearful. Very well expresed...lovely words..thanks for sharing


  • Patpowers silver member
    June 20, 2008

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    NICE WORK!!

    What a nice effort in this poem here Sara Jane! Good romantic work and so touching to read this! Glad I came across this!!


  • Tony El Great silver member
    June 19, 2008

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    Wow, I enjoyed this; it's a poem on a perspective you don't see written about much from the female side, especially in poetry. I've had a number of women give me that look as if they wanted to steal a kiss, and believe me there is a certain look; but it's a good thing they don't because then I would have to tell my wife, and she would beat the crap out of them. (LOL) ¦:¬{ I say go for it.


  • sad-eyed anime girl
    June 17, 2008

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    amazing! wow, i can say that i completely understand what you are talking about here. you have struck something so real with honesty. i love it.


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    June 17, 2008

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    I am glad I clicked on this ,So many people out there can relate as they will have had a fear of love or still do,I like the fact it comes from within,very emotonal and powerful,Great Write,Hazel


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    June 17, 2008
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    WELL WRITTEN!

    this is a very realistic write as so many have this fear of love. you wrote the emotion quite well. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • parenchma
    June 16, 2008

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    I am moved by the openess; caution can be such pain. Trust comes in knowing someone... And who knows?

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    June 16, 2008

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    this is an extremely powerful write from you. i am amazed at the honesty in your words. thank you for sharing this with me and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie *ROSE*


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 16, 2008
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    Stunning poem
    That speaks deep within the heart
    How many of us fear that love ?
    Those steps forward
    Each stanza penned is detailed and this one alone

    I do want to be fearless;

    walk barefoot over Damascus swords

    and freefall through humanity

    as the wind massacres my soul
    Is wonderful

    Julie aka Reptile Lady


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    You chose your word so well. I love the wind massacres my soul. What a descriptive poem. And, it is very emotional with strong passion showing all through it.

  • karabi
    June 16, 2008

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    EXCELLENT

    The intensity of passion can almost be touched in this exceptional poem. Words and phrases have been used in a very creative fashion to give expression to feelins generated by consummation in love.


  • Soft-Rain
    June 16, 2008

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    Loved this! I could breath every line!
    All of this write was outstanding.
    my favorite was the last verse i guess i can so relate to this fear...but am relearning to love again.


    If I could leap across infinity

    I know I would fly

    but when I get to the edge

    and look into the gulf of indigo

    it is at that moment

    I am totally consumed with the fear,

    of loving you
    as I do.



    Hugs
    ~Lisa~





  • frownsnfreckles
    June 16, 2008
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    'The band, strangles me still

    but stays wrapped

    around each heartbeat,

    the weight of its protection

    weakening my rationality'

    I wonder about this band, the security that disallows the heart to soar, yet in soaring would it fall and fade. A wonderful expression of the fear of loss within love and the anxiety of living as an individual soul.


  • ProudMomma
    June 16, 2008

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    wow believe it or not i have totally felt this way! great write! keep on penning!! this one was amazing!

  • Bad Bill
    June 16, 2008
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    You've really allowed your poetic soul to soar with this one, Sarajane! Excellent poem.

    Bill


  • leo2
    June 16, 2008
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    I'm tempted to say, "Come on in, the water's fine" but I know the feeling exactly. I know the prospect of losing yourself, your identity, and your dreams all as a result of one decision is scary but I overcame that fear by diving in headfirst...lol. And guess what?...
    I float!!!

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