We had our time together-
when we laughed, played and sang under the sun.
Oh yes, now when you think about it,
We were lucky in our own way
In that period of allocated time,
we shared what people take a lifetime to find,
All this is over now-
Somehow it will always last.
Our days are over,
What we had now stands
Eternally frozen in a clock,
the year you and i discovered each other,
grew and learned from each other.
We stood tall and faced the world,
Finders intertwined,
We thought it would last forever.
Forever apparently was not ours to be
Time froze our joy in space
Death robbed us of what we had-
Life is short and took everything away;
yet,
Our memories continue to stand still
Eternally frozen in a clock,
The echoes of what we used to share.
Some stories are not meant to last forever,
Some fairytales are not meant to end happily ever after
Still, the road has been beautiful in its own way.
The love has gone now
But the journey has been as fulfilling and blissful as ever.
am not quite satisfied with the poem, its just a first draft written in a flow of strong emotions! i'll edit it again...once i get over my laziness and writer's block lolz ;p
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Hoodwinked 1111
A sweet, heart breaking and well written poem,sad especially when death interviened to break up a loving relationship nice write......George....
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Hood-Winked
This is so pretty and yet so sad. Yes, the time we have with someone is precious and we should always enjoy it and say i love you every chance we get. You never know when the maker will call us home. You expressed yourself so beautifully here. Have a wonderful day and keep penning.
Hugs,
Sam I Am
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wow!!!! i havent read a poem of yours in sucha long time!!! this is so g8! i could never write something like that with a writer's block!
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Very Heartfelt Poem!!
A lovely poem Neera. You always wrote with such emotion. I do hope you write again. Take care.
Hugs and Smiles,
Mum
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Thanks so much!! I've been out of touch for so long, i know! Been busy with university... :-( i do hope everything's going on great for you! Take care mom, big hugs!
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Things always happen for a reason
Good poem I think, but it needs to be developed more.
What happened that the fairytale could not go on?
Don't forget spell check!
You've got a great start.
You'll probably go through several drafts, esp. adding emotion in. Best of luck!
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Actually I really liked this piece and normally I only like rhyming poetry. Good job.
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hmmm...well for writers block this is amazing...i got such a beautifuly bittersweet picture with your words that my eyes stung with tears as i read...i can relate to both the love and the loss, (tho only thru figurative death)...one small note: second stanza 7th line: did you acutally mean "finders intwined" or was it meant to be "fingers intwined"?
...other than that..this was great...keep on writing!
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some fairy tales are not meant to end happily ever after
that is so true this was a really good piece just one thing if this is a poem it could use ryme in it but other than that it was really good -
I loved it, it is very sweet and lovingly written.
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Memorable!
Through your strong flow of emotions I believe that you severed justice to poetry here. I'm curious to see what you might change because I love it the way it is. "Somehow it will always last" Yes I believe love stays frozen in time... thank you for sharing.
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For writers block this seems to be well done. I like the flow and rhythm of the piece it was full of emotion and depicts that which I think is what you were trying to say about love. Thank you for sharing this it was well done
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This is filled with raw emotions, and sometimes they make the best poems, because they are the feelings, that need to be expressed. This is bitter-sweet, while remembering the love you once shared, and the beauty of it, and the saddness of knowing that it is gone, although, love is eternal, and can never be lost, it is good to think of the good times the two of you shared, and holding on to that memory. How are you anyway, Neera? i haven't heard from you in a while. I hope all is well...
Love & Light
Debbera
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im a little confused, is this about a lover that died therefore ending the relationship? or the love between the people died?
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