you inspire
survival,
hardships defeated,
enclose happiness.
pumped to the fill
euphoria.
unity explained
when merged together.
though shortlived
fetch
unremitting exuberance
on her face
A contest entry
- Quickie: Bubbles by Folklor.
600 points, ended June 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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thanx for the apperciation
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I really liked this... you've captured the many facets of the misunderstood bubble (
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Ken
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thanx for appreciating my poem.
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i really love the wonderful detials you have used to dexcribe bubbles to a T, i really like the merged together part you have used in this poem, it has wonderful feelings and deep thoughts, i like the last line too, keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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thanx
thanx for the lovely comment. i really feel encouraged.
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the very last line undremines the fantasic image you created because obviously if moppet is a real person then obviously it kinda damages the image for people who do not know who she/he is I would recomend saying her or his then you have your personal thoughts on who it is but it also maintains our image that we relate your lovely words to. other than that it was spotless. and im seriously considering the final list of this, its just that last line im not sure about which is slightly annoying.
love the begginning where bubbles inspire survival, thats really inspirational. -
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well thanx for appreciating my poem and the correction as well. i did not login before to check ur correction. i agree with u. i will do it now.... better late than never.
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This is a wonderful poem..with good underlying message..like it..
All the best in the contest dear!
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thanx
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