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Playing Dead

Missing image

Looks can be deceiving,
you all, left me for dead.


I look...


beaten, bruised, scathed.
You said, I was weak,
jaded.

I may lay here like a carcass
drug around for entertainment.
Ah,but
better to play dormant.


Than be violated again and again.

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Something about being Jaded my prompt is the picture given.

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  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    July 2, 2008

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    I like your take on this picture. Your words shape and form thoughts and feelings of the woman laying there, and it is truly beautiful how you made a story all your own and gave life to this piece of artwork.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    better to play dormant. Than be violated again and again.

    it is so very heartbreaking that millions of people every day could have written these very same words. you have penned it far more eloquently than i ever could have dreamt. thank you for being a voice speaking the message. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie


  • Xianaria gold member
    June 18, 2008

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    This is very well written, a sad testament to those who are abused who have to play dead to be able to move on...

    I may lay here like a carcass
    drug around for entertainment.
    Ah,but
    better to play dormant.


    Than be violated again and again.

    ~ When one is truly loved and appreciated, then this person, once playing dead, shall be able to stand with her head high again.



    Love~
    Tim


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    June 15, 2008
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    http://i167.photobucket.com/albums/u131/rosedarkthorn/Pictures/Dark/806.jpg

    If this one doesn't work for you, let me know and I will send you one more.