Toupee
on windy day
is prone to blow away
Leaving the pate completely bare
Where hair
In a list
A contest entry
- Cinquain by Yemassee.
554 points, ended June 21, 2008, 23 entries
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this is quite an image. It inspired this reader to laugh and she needs that. Good form and thank you for entering
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If you wear hair and it blows away then you must wonder where your hair went..hmmm what a conundrum!
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where hair? I don't know why, but that cracks me up... just those two words... how you concluded the poem with something that makes sense, yet also seems rather random. well done! great usage of a cinquain!
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I see him chasing his hair...and after the futile attempt to retrieve it...he had nothing to pull...dont want to be the one passing by seeing this happen...unless--
you're bald too
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Very nice.
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Great cinquain full of Billbard humor! Good luck in the contest!
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Oh dear ...
a wicked twist for a bald man and this was cute! joy
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Where? indeed, where might it blow?
You need a follow-up cinquain explaining the proper way to keep a toupee firmly in place. What rhymes with glue? 
Thanks for entering the contest.
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