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Ray-ban

pawky
scattered sparkles
circumvented concave
contours of a shady sun-glass

shadow

 

 

A contest entry

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  • Papillon1
    June 20, 2008

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    I wear my sunglasses at night so I can so I can...
    I love the flow of the words, remind me of the perfect curves on an expensive pair of Ray-bans!


  • Malabu
    June 19, 2008

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    what came to my mind reading this strange cinquain is, a dazzling honey wearing Gucci sunglasses in a bikini? Lol you crack me up…but I could not imagine anything other than this… tell me now…am I a moron or just a imaginative old man…


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    As classy as Ray-Bans were intended to be.
    And perhaps more so!

    Deserving of sparkles!
    (Perhaps the contest sponsor
    can find some...)

    Aesthete


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Being American I had to look "pawky" up.

    I like the alliteration,pawky actually seems the odd man out since the rest are essentially "s" and "c" words.

    There is also a couple half-rhymes I like here.

    Thanks for entering.


    • Papillon1
      June 20, 2008
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      Perhaps you would have been happier if the poet had used the word cocky?

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