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Love on the Road

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Alone, to love in a water world
where whispers seep silently,
no life shadows sink between us ,
but raindrops kiss our innocent skin,
locked liquid in happiness.

Feel my lips caress with tales I tell of
true adoration trickling,
tumbling from wet skies.

Grey grass of bitumen grows
in desire and passion of tenderness,
playing soft rivulets of kisses sweet,
musical moments for us alone.

Locked forever, time stops,
we lie in love eternal.


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Acknowledgement: Image from AP contest site.

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  • Judith Chandler
    July 14, 2008

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    "no life shadows sink between us." How nice that would be. Don't know exactly what "bitumen" is but I like the sound of the word.

    Another romantic write.
    jjj

  • carole21
    July 5, 2008

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    nice

    nice romantic write for the prompt . . liked "Alone, to love in a water world" and "we lie in love eternal" . . congrats on the trophy


  • ecrivain01 gold member
    July 1, 2008

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    Very nice ...

    and I'm particularly suprised to see anyone use "bitumen" in a poem. Coal, isn't it? I should look it up to be sure, but it seems like that's what it means.

    Anyway, good job with the poem and congratulations on your trophy.


    • R S Adams Jr silver member
      July 1, 2008
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      thank you ecrivain 01

      In Australia we call the road surface bitumen. I think it is gravel and tar mixed to make a flat, hard surface. Glad you liked the poem.


  • thepoetssoul
    June 23, 2008

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    A wondefully written piece of poetry.
    The imagery and flow is most exellent
    Words of beauty that added to the quality of the picture
    Congradulation's on the Bronze.

    Tony


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 18, 2008

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    A truly beautiful write!!! Very well penned. Lovely detail to amorous thought. Great use of imagery throughout!


  • poet2angels gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    This is lovely!
    Such beautiful language and alliteration as well as a romantic quality that seeps into the heart when reading...Every line is lovely

    Lynda


    • R S Adams Jr silver member
      June 18, 2008
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      Thank you ,Lynda

      Thanks for the bronze. I am very pleased. Thanks for the contest. I know they are work for the judges.


  • Errant Panther gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    lovely alliteration and romance in this poem. very well constructed with soft language and careful word choices. well done and best wishes.

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