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night dancer



she steps
invisibly
until the light shines bright
then, with every move, her body
appears


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  • Papillon1
    June 19, 2008
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    Wonderful

    I see her dancing, and you have put such perfect form into her steps...


  • Malabu
    June 19, 2008

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    comes to mind; illusions of imaginations to someone desired andlonged for… more so the image painted can be vivid in mind… leaving much more of our own conclusions to be drawn to this surreal write…lovely cinquain
    Mal


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    June 17, 2008
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    Visually compelling...

    Aesthete


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    For me it reminds me of the dancer walking on stage to the spotlight. But of course the "dancer" could be metaphorical and actually mean more.

    I see her in my head, lithesome and alive. Thanks for entering.