I'm so madly in love with you
But you are too far away to know that now
It is to late now but i write this as if i was talking to you
Though how much it hurts to not be able to speak to you
I endure every heartache there is
For the hope of seeing you again
Now that i'm so far away from you
Now that i have lost you
I realized i have lost everything
My heart beats for
Now my smile is only a mere mask
To cover the pain i feel
But I perfectly remember your smile
Full of passion
So innocent
So real
Your eyes
It never seemed to fade
It never seemed to lose hope
Now that you are far away from me
I have realized you are everything i want
Cause you are everything i am not
It seems like you are the missing pieces in me
Time and isolation has made me realize this
Can you imagine what it feels like
To be alone all night
And to only think of you
Imagine you
To wonder what it feels like to be with you
So much pain and sorrow ruled my life
And once more it has come to hunt me again
I wonder why my life is like this
I wonder if killing myself ends every sorrow
For i know that there is rest in death
But what keeps me from that
What makes me want to live
What makes me want to live
Its you!
Its because of you!
I dont know how you do it
But its like you take control of everything of me
It pains
It hurts to think that you dont know
This feelings i feel for you
It hurts that you see me as no one
It hurts to think of giving you up
Which in the first place i have never had you
It hurts
It hurts
Though my life is filled with pain
I may as well be used to pain
But the pain you give me really tears a man apart
To sleep and to look forward to a day
Of somehow to fix myself
To self create your ideal guy
To master so hard the art of impressing you
I believe in every feeling i have
My feelings are stained so much
My life has been deceived by the people
Who are suppose to guide it
And you are the only hope i have
You are the only reason I have to live
A life full of suffering
You are the only light i see
You are
You are what i want the most in life
And what pains the most
What kills me everyday
And to live back again another day
Is that you will never know
You will never know
Such powerful emotions i have for you
You will never know how much you mean to me
You will never know how much I cried for you
You will never know how much I would want to treat you good
You will never know
Because
I I
Am Was
So To
Far Fucking
From Late
You To speak!
Author notes
the mistake here, the only mistake i think over every hell day and i regret everytime i wake up, is for not telling her right away the feelings i felt for her before i went away..
option 5, lost love i think, if it was too long and bore you im sorry i just wanted to gave this old write another shot.
circumstances and stupidity and isolation are the main reasons of this, circumstances has shifted me away from her!, and stupidity for not telling her right away, and isolation for realizing everything when it was too late, or do i make sense?, i hope this gave you the impact, the feeling you are looking for, cause even writing this pains alot ^^,
A contest entry
- Everybody Loves Somebody by CatQueen248.
450 points, ended August 3, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mistakes by XHollowXEyesX.
600 points, ended August 19, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this was a very very long piece of writing, not normally a style that I usually go for as I tend to get distracted easily, but you involved so many raw emotions and kept the wording and flow so intense the whole way through, I couldnt stop reading. So sadenning to read.
beautiful write.
Thanks for entering.
All the best
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"But you are "too" far away to know that now" Same with next "too" No it did not bore me at all. All the emotion you put in this was amazing. I can really relate too, switch some things around of course. It so hard to love someone so much and then to lose them. It's even harder to accept that you only lost them because you couldn't tell them how you felt or were too blinded to see what was going on. I hope things are better now. I don't know when you wrote this. I especially liked the last stanza. It really brought your poem together. And thank you for putting the option down. Also thank you for entering my contest
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Thanks for your entry...The emotion of this piece is intense, I think the best part of it is the end:
"You will never know
Because
I I
Am Was
So To
Far Fucking
From Late
You To speak!"
I have to say this is a pretty masterful ending, and I thank you for sharing this, and no, it didn't bore me - I only put that in my rules because otherwise I get landed with spans of epics that DO end up being boring....really, thank you for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck.
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ouch!
there u go again, making me hurt again! this was such a heart-breakiing write and reading this was just really sad and painful!
This just had incredibe flow, and tho its long, kept me alive till the end!
Great job my angel... and your ending... creative i gotta say (i took a while to figure it out, kinda at least! ) good luck in the contest!!! u r one heck of a writer!
~loveie, ranji
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"You will never know
Because
I I
Am Was
So To
Far Fucking
From Late
You To speak!"
Genius.
Wow man, you better win this.
The emotion in this piece is so incredibly raw.
Love it.
♥
~Princess of Shadows~ -
This is a great poem. Strong feelings. Good use of words. Thanx for entering good luck in the contest.
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