I haven’t met the mark,
made enough sacrifices in my life.
Many corners wait, left unfurnished
from all, this journey could truly bring.
I thought I gave so much
found out I gave so little
all the while, faith was vacillating.
Desire to rise above it all
lost to boundless horizons.
Now is the time, needing someone to give to me
I cannot walk on my own I am ready to receive.
Author notes
free verse - prompt - giving...11 lines...
written only for a contest...so not like how i am feeling , so don't go getting worried lol
In a list
A contest entry
- 11/11/GIVING by tainfinite.
475 points, ended June 23, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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And The Fallen Shall Rise
...glad this won a prize...
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Thank you
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i love that i have a connection with the peom to because i felt like that to.
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Your words echo a truth many fail to see. Give as you get and again you'll receive. If all live by this the circle would continue forever. Unfortunately it rarely works out that way. Well done!
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this is really good.
i like this.
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we should ALL be getting something (no matter how miniscule it may seem) in some way for our troubles (my stupid opinion anyway! lol!)
This one was rather blue and my mouth definitely didn't lift while reading it
(lol! not quite sure whether that was the effect it was supposed to have, but that's what it did to me ~shrug~ )
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it is a rather blue poem, but it's only thoughts inspired from the prompt of giving...it is kinda the effect it was supposed to hve, certainly not was I going for making a smile rise..hope it didn't get you too down though
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Sometimes we don't give back what we give out! Lot of truth in this sis... even though it's not how you're feeling right now, I think we've all felt this at one time!!
Poignant and touching write!
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Thanks SiS
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A very sensitive write...but I am SO glad it is just for the contest Honey!!!LOL! You have a flair for feelings...and your poems are presented in such beautiful form and displayed with such wonderful visual compliments!!!
Love You~
Aunty Az
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i like ot think i hav a flair for feelings etc, so thanks Aunty Az
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You bring out such emotions in your writing and this is no exception... Such a sadness here - the road to asking for help is not easy and you've captured it beautifully...
Ken
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emotion has always been easy for me..i am a very emotional person for real lol
Thank you so much for your thoughts
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PRETTY, PRETTY
Superb penning you have done here. Was this a picture prompt contest? Just curious, for if it is, it is brilliant! Even if it isn't, it's still brilliant! And the background is just precious! I love the write, and I also love the fact that you said not to get worried, that this is not how you are feeling, for I already had my car keys in my hand, getting ready to come and see you to cheer you up!
Again, the piece is divine. And my favorite part is the very last line-I cannot walk on my own I am ready to recieve. What a true statement. And I like your free verse idea. Not your usual type of penning, but you have done honorably well with the form. It is just priceless! Love ya!!!!!
POETDONTKNOWIT
WRITING IT HER OWN WAY
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Hey my Aunty
Missed u
Not a pic contest no, I just had it in my collection, is one i use to put up on shitty feeling days hehe. Felt it suited my words and wanted to give it a bit more..the background a friend made for a contest, it too seemed fitting
aw I love u, you were going come rescue me hehehe, thats why i always make sure to add in, if it's needed,, not to worry heheh
still very truthful these words, of course...I have felt this way many a time, and we do need to be able to admit we need help!!
Thanks darl, love your thoughts
Cin
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taiinfinite
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a great prompt , thank you
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