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Boo

Swimming in and out
from darkness to light
I come to you when
I see that you have food
and I need something to eat
when you sit down on the ground
I know when you are around
then I pop and and think boo
but I know that I don't scare you

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  • TheUglySceneGirl...
    July 28
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    Aw. I liked the last part. "I know when you are around then I pop and and think boo but I know that I don't scare you" Hehe i liked the way this was wrote even tho it was short it was very enjoying. great piece. ..<3.. Shelly

  • slick99
    July 9

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    this is awesome Sunshine Princess!!! i like this poem!! keep writing and congrats on the honorable mention!!! -slick99


  • Melodies silver member
    June 26

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    WOW WOW WOW!!! You have nearly 300 poems here at All Poetry! This poem is darling and a very fishy swishy poem.

  • Darkwell silver member
    June 25

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    i love this its so playful and lovely with nice rhymes an rhythms

    your so talented


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    June 18

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    Are now September is always doing that to us we through the feed in the others come up but not September then suddenly he is there Boo and makes us so pleased to see him. Thanks for this entry Brian.

  • magikal fairy poet silver member
    June 17

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    cute

    my favourite two lines are " then i pop out and think boo"

    and "but i know i didn't scare you"

    what a cute poem genna

    and i do agree with hope angel

    "Your poems bring smiles to my face!"

    and really they do

    this is a really cute poem

    bye sun-angel P.S: here is 3 clappys for you



  • xxhoopstar21xx
    June 16

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    aww cute!!!
    i like the "swimming in and out from darkness to light"! very flowing and pretty!



    SilverWolf
  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    June 16

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    Wow sweetheart this is nice. A little different from some of your other poems. That's a great thing. Thanks for sharing it; good luck in the contest.
    I love you.
    Daddy

  • my.stars.dont.shine
    June 15
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    this just made my day a little better.
    its sooo cute! =]
    good luck in the contest!


  • eternal memories
    June 15
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    Aww, that's so cute!
    Very simple, but well done
    Good luck in the contest, hun :]


  • Hope Angel
    June 15

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    This is really cute sweetie!
    Your poems bring smiles to my face!
    I love you loads and I'm proud of you. Good luck in the contest


  • Melodies silver member
    June 15
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    Smiling at your fishy poem! Really cute... the reader can see that big 'ol fish.


  • SweetNessaLynn
    June 15
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    awww This is adorable. Best of luck in the contest. Much love always. -Aunt Nessa

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