Ocean
deep mystery
lighted by a full moon
reflects rippled silver nuance
waving…
In a list
A contest entry
- Cinquain by Yemassee.
554 points, ended June 21, 2008, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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And how long it's been I came across a cinquain - a form I could say I enjoy the most actually...
That fourth line keeps rippling through my head actually... Great alliteration in there and off course, the image...
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congrats
Congratulations on your trophy for this enigmatic little poem. I like the layout and the way you have used the verb as the final word.
I'm not sure why you used the word "lighted". is that a real word, or did you make it up out of poetic license?
best wishes,
myron.
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Thanks Myron. I like making up words, but rarely use them when writing a poem.
"Main Entry:
3light
Function:
verb
Inflected Form(s):
lit Listen to the pronunciation of lit \ˈlit\ or light·ed; light·ing
Date:
before 12th century
intransitive verb1: to become light : brighten —usually used with up 2: to take fire3: to ignite something (as a cigarette) —often used with up"
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wonderful!
Congrats to you for a great win! Thanks for your talented message of undulation
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Wonderful. Such lovely movement and play of light.
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Thanks Mallie
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how does one swim in words so deep and not get touched??
Impossible! -
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Thank you Paps
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ahh...! not even the latest digicam with super megapixel can outstand the image you have capture with the magic of your words.
i so admire you with your choice of pics
but with this write...whoa! it's like my eyes stop blinking...not wanting the image to be out of sight...in my mind per se lol
this is one of the most beautiful images i have ever imagine on my mind
Anna Lee
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Writing in pixels! Funny that just few minutes ago I was looking at some photo cameras, deciding if I buy a new one or not.
Thanks dear Anna for your lovely comments
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Beautifully written with captivating imagery!
A lovely entry for this contest and one of my favorite subjects to read about!!
I wish you all the best!!
Jasminerose
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I think PK, A2000 and Wattles have spoken eloquently about your poem, far better than I ever could so I'll just state my humble appreciation of the essence beneath the pen. The immense talent pales in comparison to the lady.
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Wherever there is mystery
there is depth to explore,
the need to know more...
Intriguing...
M-C
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Oh wow. The Gaze'y lady is out sailing again. The warm tropical breeze plays her body. The moon offers opportunity. Her heart longs for more. ---- And I'm captured in my room gazing over the screen out the window, wondering why... what if? ----- Thank you. (For you ---- http://www.au6.com/moomba.html )
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Loved the sight! Thanks Eric
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It seems that there is an idea and an image in each line ..sometimes more... so much to the skill of the writer and beauty of the form... even the spaces between the words and verses seem to be filled with light and deep waters...wonderful writing...h
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You mean it? The !!! sounds definite. Not sure Yem knows the meaning of those however, he's a tad illiterate.
What wraps this whole thing up is the word, "nuance" it's seems to be a pregnant word here, full of life. It's that nuance that has the reader, this reader anyway, dreaming of that silver rippling and what lies above, beneath and geyond...for it's not just the depth, but the breadth and length, the horizon...see that is what the word "nuance" does for me.
I like it, more than I have the intelligence to state.
Have you read my Cinquain? Please do, but I must warn you, I won't return the favor, I am a very busy man. But go read mine, and when I post more I will send you IM's...
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