A beauty, a demoness,
the highest of her order,
a queen of the ever-after,
where the demons reign,
watching and waiting.
Hold your breath; silence,
hear them coming?
She leads them here,
with grace and swords,
an army is marching.
The time has come
mankind is going to fall,
to their hands and knees,
begging for the mercy,
of the black hearted.
"I want to hear,
their cries of despair!
I want to see,
their red blood flow,
in to crimson rivers!"
Tortured screams of pain,
echoing under a clouded sky,
breathing the thick smoke,
of cities and towns
consumed by the flames.
Locked doors and windows,
will do little to keep them,
from their conquest,
she will have it all,
this world and your souls.
A beauty, a demoness,
the highest of her order,
a queen of the ever-after,
where the demons reign,
watching and waiting.
Hold your breath; silence,
hear them coming?
She leads them here,
with grace and swords,
an army is marching.
The end has come,
mankind will now fall,
to their hands and knees,
at the end of the swords
of Raaksha and her army.
Author notes
Well this one is a little different to what I usually write, lol. Please, don't be shy to let me know where I can improve this.
My picture prompt was:
“The Commodore” by blackeri:
http://blackeri.deviantart.com/art/The-Commodore-48404715
A contest entry
- Darkwrite Extravaganza Season II, Round III by Immortal Obscurity.
700 points, ended June 18, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 5 by whispernthedark.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You brought that picture to life, nice write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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This is a very interesting take on the prompt! I could see that woman's battle-hardened face as I read this, and I wasn't looking at the picture
That artist is one of my favourites, and you have done this picture justice, as I knew you would. Well done, and good luck!
Laura x
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Thank you
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bravo!
ooo I LOVE this! you really dove into your prompt! love the background story you give it!!! very nicely done!
and the repetition only adds to the poem, it really makes this Raaksha scarier! well done!
and good luck in the contest!
oh one thing, the last stanza...3rd line, should be knees...not kness lol
simple mistake, I really like this
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lol, thank you for pointing that out to me and thank you for the comment, I'm glad you like it
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Wow this is a very good write Kate Well done i likes it!
Tam xxx
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Thanks!!!
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This is a very feroscious write. I think you took the assigned picture and made it your own. Well done with this. and good luck in the challenge
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
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Thank you
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