There's a murder of crows, off to heaven
A coal black swirl to the sky
I couldn't help but find you there
Cussing out god without a care
Does he know you now, like I tried?
{Chorus}
So cry me a river, my baby
Make it long -- deep & wide 'till off blue
Because, this is going to be the last time
You steal my verse, and you kill its rhyme
The way you love me, takes some getting used to.
[Bridge]
As the closer I get becomes too far
I lower my guard, you raise the bar
The more you're filled, is the more I am removed.
{Repeat the chorus from above once}
There's no room for me in your heaven
Just a long hallway with a "wet floor" sign
The mood is low, the rent's too high
Why call it living if every one dies?
Aint it funny, how a man will walk that line.
{Chorus once}
[Bridge once]
{Chorus again & fade away}
Author notes
Ring of Fire
Written December 30th, 2003
In a list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 19 of 19
-
Interesting, good.
-
yes. yes, this one. juicy and wet, like the nose of a dog.
-
I liked this indeed, it had a different flow, the picture made it all the more interesting, great work, Glad you entered the contest! Good Luck!
~Codie -
i cant say i like or i dont like i am kmixed here. some of the lyrics i can totaly get with, but some of it is totaly mind boggiling. like when you said As the closer I get becomes too far..would it not make more sense if it said as the closer i got it becomes.....i dont know i cant hear it to music so i am most possibly totaly off here.
-
This one definately captures the things that love will do to a person! This is a great piece! If only i had a sound card I would listen to them all! We may not have the same style of writing or songs for that matter but I enjoyed this piece very much! Keep on!
-
Nirvana -- love buzz
-
Horus are you a father lol
-
One can only hope so on father's day
-
wonderful bravo enchore cant even say anymore
woo so nice u are sure going to win
Edited on Jun 20, 9:49 p.m. because 'edited by a moderator due to spam 6-20-04'. -
"There's no room for me in your heaven
Just a long hallway with a "wet floor" sign
The mood is low, the rent's too high
Why call it death if no one dies?
Aint it funny, how a man will walk that line."
I like how you used the wet floor sign to show that the heaven you wanted was slippery/dangerous and that you had to be careful. Most people would avoid a wet floor altogether if possible. I like the comparison. -
thats really, really good. nice lyrics...very intresting choice of words...murder of crows to heaven, wet-floor sign. gotta love it...or do you?
xXxColleenxXx -
Buy a cd.
-
I want to hear this put to music(...) but other than that I loved everything about it, and thank you for the tip on my (...)'s
see I can learn, kind of.
-Carina- -
'Different... quite the imagery it brings with a "wet floor" sign in heaven. Verses such as that take the typical image that one might have had before and put quite the twist in it.
An interesting piece. I remember reading something of yours sometime back and thought of it as being very different and worth visiting again. 'Was a nice visit. Good stuff. Lyrics in text and not put outloud to hear seem to add to the curiosity of some pieces. I'm sure the curiosity in its outcome would be a good thing here. Best of luck with bringing such pieces to life... -
what a beautiful song jeremy thank you for putting in the chorus parts that way it easyier to know they are lyrics
naughty -
mmm..i think you should play it, put it as an mp3 and send it to me...
people do the weirdest things for others, or even for themselves, human nature i suppose..
Nyx... -
good guess work
-
I bet you say that to all the girls.
-
love the way you write.
Adding your comment:
1 - 19 of 19
2 old applause
