Can you hear the world?
We're infecting it
We are the virus & the universe is the victim
We're spreading & feasting on a life
Hear the earth's heartbeat
Listen to the voice of the weak child
We're killing her
Mother earth murderers
Author notes
Prompt 1
A contest entry
- My first PiF by peridotPixi.
425 points, ended June 17, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Say What You Need To Say by MissPennyLane.
450 points, ended June 20, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like this piece. Gives the effect that the earth is alive and we are killing it slowly... well thats my view of it anyway. Really like it. Thanks for a good read
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This was a very good write, very unique and truthful. Thanks so much for the entry!
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wow i liked this one to. I liked it mainly because of it is very creative. Got me thinking about those things.
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i really love the detials you have used in this wonderful poem, i love the feelings and how you took the lighting ball and turned it into an infected earth i love it, thank you for the entry good luck and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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I like to think though that there are folks like me that go out there and act as the antibiotic
(being a cop and all) lol
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This is very powerful! It says so much. I love this line..."We are the virus & the universe is the victim" Very powerful words! ***Pam***
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Very Good!! This is so sad but true. You spoke volumns in so very few words.
Good Job
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Wow! this was an amazing poem!
very powerful and I can tell it came straight from your heart. I really loved this and I hope maybe you could comment some of mine too!
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Wow, very poignant. It's sad really that we ARE the Earth's infection... But very accurate. Way to put that metaphor together!! I really liked this!!
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Thank you, I really liked writing it. I believe that it's my best poem so far and I've been here for 5 years
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