With no father,
I stand alone
Hatred soaked rapist,
cold as stone
Story unknown;
Alone
Author notes
Picture prompt
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 15 Words - [One Day Only] by Desire.
700 points, ended June 16, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Happy father's day
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~
I kept seeing a clown but strange as it sounds...being shown the serial killer-rapist John Wayne Gacy Jr.-
I'm given words: It's Over~
Nudged to mention word: Peace- nowwwwwwwwwwwwww I am just getting that as I read Your piece- and it feels a reference to let it out- scream and shout but not
cast doubt that You are stronger than ever before that is what I kept getting after reading Your words~
I'm also hearing: there is no reason to fear... is here...( like the pause You put whom You feel connected too) I'm hearing word: relative~ like another relative
Hopefully that makes some sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
cold as stone
Unique Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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very sad, this must be so hard. written about very effectively, the sparseness of this is very powerful i think, conveys a lot of hurt in just a few words.
found the line "Hatred soaked rapist" especially striking, just the description of being "soaked" with hatred an original and fitting way to describe it, and can be interpreted several ways.
"cold as stone," especially in comparison to such an amazing line, seemed a bit more common and overused, i think you can come up with something better, stronger and more creative. also wasn't sure about the inconsistent punctuation, was mildly distracting.
but well done nonetheless, and if this is based even partially on personal experience i'm very sorry. -
just sad
I feel feel for you and I read your pain.
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