pinions oar the sky
answering the fledglings call
averse flying fish
Author notes
I think, perhaps, it's an "aha" moment for the fish as well (LOL) And, before you ask - "oar" is not a typo. I used the word to draw the image of rowing as well as include a homophone of "o'er" depicting position.
averse: reluctant, opposed.
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: Provided by Swan song
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Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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Nice job Ken.....love your ability to write more than what we would have seen through only our eyes.....God bless,
Bear ~
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I like the pinions oaring the sky rather than water. I like the mix of air and water - the fish seems to be against it. Oh, just picked up the homophone in your notes for oar/o'er, clever.
Marlene -
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Too bad only you and I thought that
... Ce la vie.
Thank you for the comment...
Ken
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hahaha, I like this, powerful & funny,
great word choices too
good luck in the contest!
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This is beautiful, what a lovely poetic image you paint.
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'pinions oar the sky'
This line is golden.
I admire your work here.
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Yes, we both took the food path - did you mean soar the sky in the first line? Don't think fish enjoy flying much! LOL
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I'm sure they don't (LOL). No, I meant "oar" as in rowing... I liked that image of the wings moving thru the air likes oars moving a boat thru the water... But thanks for noting it... and thank you for the comment...
Ken
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Wonderful haiku!! Well done, good luck in the contest. Love it.
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