Have you ever felt lost and rejected?
Like nothing has ever really connected?
Do you feel like the world is more of a pest
And inside yourself is where the real problems rest?
Or your mind isn't working right anymore
And your heart seems to be a sinister core?
Maybe you really feel like giving up
Because you just like a neglected pup?
Welcome to my part of the planet and
I hope you plan to live long in this land.
For this is a wonderful place to stay
If your having a very unpleasant day!
We'll drink until the sun comes over the hill,
But don't worry; you don't have to pay the bill.
Everything is paid for and to do anything is cost-free;
Just forfeit your soul, that is the only key.
Remember the old wise tale of the tortoise and hair?
And the one about Goldilocks and the three bears?
Do you get what kind of feeling I'm talking about-
That feeling of happiness and total free-doubt?
Can you sense that great deal of joy and fun
Without having to use that skinny drug-gun?
Or is it just not sinking in at all
And you just don't feel like having a ball?
It's okay mate, come join the dream-chase:
Following the white rabbit to Cheshire-cat's base.
By now you've already lost yourself in this
Polar side of the most exciting bliss.
I believe it's time for a another round
Of tripped-out realities never found.
Your time is over, bring out the minds to duel;
and the Tin Man says, "Ello and Good Day Dear Fool."
Author notes
ummmm....don't ask because I haven't the slightest idea where this come from, though all things are for a reason.
This is just something odd that flow from my fingertips last night and I finished today.
Comments and Critique always welcomed!
Hope you Enjoy and God Bless!
p.s.
"I bet everyone will take away from this poem, different
lines that spoke to them."
-ears2hearyou
Take whatever you get from this poem and let me hear what you get, because I'm still trying to figure out what has been written.
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Comments
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A lot of great imagery is in here. And the inconclusiveness about the poem helps with the attractive expressiveness.
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it is like taking candy from a baby,
such a simple trap that we all have fallen into,
the simple pleasures in life,
are the ones that don't have a price attached.
hopefully live and learn
oh so wonderful gem of a write my friend.
God bless...
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many feelings and thoughts are aroused in this poem!
you led us beautifully into the struggles of
many.
i really enjoyed your use of the fairy-tales, added a layer that brought us in closer to understanding of
what realities and non-realities you were presenting.
I bet everyone will take away from this poem, different
lines that spoke to them.
interesting it is to read it several times, letting
it slowly speak to different parts of our minds.
This was hard to do i bet!
ears/Seattle way to write!
a poem you can really sink your teeth into.
p.s. don't be surprised, if some just don't understand
it.
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