I see the world before me
My finger off safety
See my sons tears
My daughters fears
This world ending
My finger bending
The light muzzeled flash
See the faint clothes to skin clash
Blood across the wall
The long long hall
Ending at a gate
Conductor points, 5 mins late
Watch the train pass on by...
I See what its like to die...
Author notes
...Im guessing this is showing up cause I have the song 'Red Water' - Rehab. stuck in my head, sad part is it really did go jus like that flashes almost like the old movie sequences where they are remembering something... Well good luck with the contest, I might try again without a depressing (how ever great that song is it is really sad)song stuck in my head.
A contest entry
- Close your eyes and tell me what you see by Meroza.
400 points, ended June 18, 2008, 31 entries
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You had some nice flow on your rhyme there, and a good way of capturing your view, well done
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