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Sip

Sip
from my lips
the words of my heart
dripping
down my chin.

Touch
my mouth
in quiet-please
to shush
my loud grin.

Lick
the feeling
of sugar
and love
coating the
candy-I.

Hold
my hand
in trembling fear
as I scream
and silent cry:

I love you.

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  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Oh, how I remember my first time saying, "I love you". I was just short of 19, and I remember how alien the words felt coming out of my mouth, like a foreign language... I was scared as fuck, and I can completely relate to this poor person's nervousness. Well done, and thanks for entering.

    Laura


  • ennovy silver member
    June 22, 2008
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    just wonderful words of love...thanks for enteringnovy & Brazos


  • Brazos silver member
    June 22, 2008

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    You scream the alarm of love with these short, but very well composed lines. Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.

    Novy & Brazos