A beautiful morning with a shiny sun
A colorful art comes to mind in turn
But sadness grabbed you with powerful arm
From the moment you heard the morning alarm
Far away from you
Still keeping the same view
Your sadness will be taken away
- - by morning dew
Author notes
When 'I' Feature my poems, 'I' feature it with a hope to get a comment. Even if you don't like it, make a comment let me know why you don't like it..
A contest entry
- Quickie by Blooming Poet.
675 points, ended June 14, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please help me to turn to be a better writer
Comments
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I thought this was so delightfully written. You have given this picture life with your words. One does not have to use many words to get their feelings across as you have shown. The words used have conveyed a lovely thought.
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'Your sadness will be taken away
by morning dew'
This is an usually beautiful stroke. The poem could nor end with a better idea. It makes one think about the possibilities of the changing environment that takes shape automatically. Nature has an immense healing power, It comes to our rescue when we have lost hope. Every day is a new refreshing day in Nature.
The poem is highly effective and meaningful. It is short but powerful.
Rahi
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this is a small but very strong meaningful poem
i like the meaning of the poem
though i am not sure whether i caught your meaning or got my own meaning
anyway you have done a great job
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aw how beautiful- very touching.
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very good poem
short but intense
i am new here i dont know many things around
but what i can say is this poem i liked very much
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oops. I meant to say, I loved it. It appears I forgot the t
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anyway thanks for the bronze
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Wow, great choice of words. Loved i
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hie
i really enjoyed your contest. Seems like your comment is half done..it is my honor to be in the finalist's list
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I'm dense (LOL) wasn't aware of the second picture... Now that I've seen it... Got It!
Still a beautiful poem and now, one that fits the prompt well.
Ken -
Very nice...love the feel of this!
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Nicely done... not sure of the tie in but I'm a bit dense at times ()... Beautiful flow and lovely rhyme... Best of luck...
Ken
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