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I've Had Enough

Here we go for the hundredth time,
once again you've left me behind.
Here I thought everything was fine,
but now you've gone and changed my mind.

Toying now, no excuse,
you led me on then cut me loose.
Tell me now 'cause I can't deduce,
which were the lies and which the truths?

Really thought that you'd play fair,
really thought that you did care.
You were good, you had me snared,
made me believe that there was something there.

Yeah, you think you can win,
Win me back with a charming grin,
Think I'll wait for your return,
And I'll just be yours again.

I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
When you come back for me, when you come back for me,
I've had enough.

Fine, go, hope you know,
that it breaks my heart to let you go.
I'll talk tough, won't let it show,
God, how much you have hurt me though.

Sometimes I wanna scream and curse,
Love is another waiting hearse.
I'll just retreat, my wounds to nurse,
Tried to call you but nothing works.

Fuck, this hurts, I won't lie,
Won't talk to me, I don't know why.
But no more tears from me you'll bring,
I'm done with that, you won't see me cry.

So yeah, you think you can win,
Win me back with a charming grin.
Think I'll wait for your return,
And I'll just be yours again.

I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
When you come back for me, when you come back for me,
I've had enough.

I gave to you my heart...
But you won't give yours.
And now you've lost your chance...
I WILL NOT WAIT FOR YOU!

I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
When you come back for me, when you come back for me,
I've had enough.
I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
I've had enough, I won't be here when you come back for me
When you come back for me, when you come back for me,
I've had enough.

I've had enough.

I've had enough.

Author notes

Lyrical re-write of Linkin Park's song, "Bleed It Out", based on a real situation I was in.
I strongly advise you to listen to the song as you read my words. If you don't have the music, go here:
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=M2MhH6mBg58

Would LOVE to hear truthful comments on this.

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  • Progandother
    May 22

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    ...haha...I have issues with Linkin Park so thank you for forcing me to enter realms that annoy me...I need to open up more...

    ...syllabically this is word for word exactly as the whole pace goes because of course...it is rewritten version of the lyrical input...

    ...I like how you've created your own spin on it because honestly I know how hard it is to manipulate the mood of a song to work for you instead of with you and you've done that here with a lot to be admired...very well done and good luck in the contest...

    Oliver


  • Umi Juvariel silver member
    April 9

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    I would really have to say that you should've written this as your own song instead of re-writing another. That would've made it work a lot more in your favor. But, regardless, it was well done. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Flowergirl
    April 8

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    wow this is a great piece i love it keep up the great work this one realy shows the hurt i love it i would give you more applauds if i could nice job


  • Ami
    April 8
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    I already heard the song..
    "I gave to you my heart...
    But you won't give yours.
    And now you've lost your chance...
    I WILL NOT WAIT FOR YOU!"
    That part reminds me of some one
    well actually this whole song reminds me of an ex
    I really like it
    Great Write and
    Thank you for entering
    Good Luck


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 13, 2008

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    Amazing. That's all I have to say for this. You rewrote that song in such an amazing way that was so captivating and just wow. I'm in awe :] Thanks for entering & I wish you the best of luck ! ♥

  • deepheart
    June 16, 2008

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    I know that pain. And I wish it upon no one.

    You made an outstanding attempt in the revealing of the inner deep of a tortured soul. I wonder as to the inspiration of such passion???


  • BornWithAPen
    June 14, 2008

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    you know when i posted this contest, i never imagined that the enries would be soooo amazing, this was stunning, syllable perfect, and also had a logical storyline running thru it, really well done.
    Michael

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