certain death
'til greedy hawk spots rabbit
freefall to freedom
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A contest entry
- SURVIVAL HAIKU by Swan song.
650 points, ended June 23, 2008, 15 entries
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooooooo!! I love this haiku! Great lines of inspiration here, truly.
BRAVO!
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Wow!
I had to read this & then keep looking at the pix. I was confused for a bit & then got it! Great take on the prompt! Yup, I guess a rabbit would be a finner meal!
I love rabbits & Father says to not eat 'em & I'm so happy to accommodate His command 'cause I'd rather pet them! I love the way you can insert that wonderful wit of yours into a sad scenario! Death by hawk can't be pleasant! Hope that fish landed well. 
Nice job with this Dennis...
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A nicely crafted haiku. I like that this isn't totally traditional. Love what you saw in the picture.
Kelli
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Alleluia for the fish... I hope it was a soft landing. I can't even imagine what the fish is going through.
Marlene
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lol the fish was not so lucky. good haiku
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now, I know why your called "Haiku-bless-you"-- at first I thought this author most probably write about haikus.
Guess I was right. lol. excellently done with this piece... haikus are rather fun, hard though but fun.
have a blessed day
-Blanche
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An excellent haiku. Lovely presentation. Good imagery, flow and tone. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. Superb aha line 3. Well penned and much enjoyed.
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Some days are diamonds eh.
Made me smile
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I love the last line. Great write!
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Pretty bird! xD
I still don't know how yo write Haiku's.
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Nice twist... but don't hawks know about a "bird in the hand..."? Beautifully done. Best of luck.
Ken
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Well Done
You are the King of the Haiku. Beautifully Written and expressed. Great Job. Good Luck in the conntest.
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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