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A Slow Burn

Come to my honeyed tongue
Inhale my emotions slowly
Lay me down gently

Then...

Catch my mouth as you exhale
and lick my fragile lower lip
to still the quiver






Author notes

A contest entry for: PIF - Free Verse Word Prompt.

The word: "Patience"

REQUIREMENTS:
30 words exactly
free verse only
left align
plain background/no images.

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  • Dalaney gold member
    July 3, 2008
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    thank you very much for your entry I enjoyed your take on the prompt. Love, Lane


  • Justin
    June 19, 2008

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    You did a great job with capturing patience without a lot of words. I like the lust/passion that was connected to the poem as well. You have a stunning vocabulary. splendid write!


  • Terry Collett
    June 19, 2008
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    Cool poem.

    Good work.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    June 15, 2008
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    Great last line.